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| Open Poetry #6 |
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Serenaded To Sleep |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA 
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Serenaded To Sleep You laid your head on my pillow last night, snuggled up close to my ear, and began to sing to me. Your song soothed my mind and I drifted off, content in its melody. I could feel your warmth beside me through out the night; your breath falling softly upon my neck; and each time I woke, you serenaded me back to sleep with your song. When daylight broke through the windows, I reached to touch your body, stroke your fur; and once more you began to purr.  Have you ever noticed That the words... "Goodbye" "I'm sorry" "I love you" Are so easy to pronounce ...Yet so hard to say ~Javan |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
Ruth, you got my heart with this one, how precious the love of a dear kitty cat. That sound could serenade anyone to sleep. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
Beautiful Ruth. Nothing like that sort of song to relax you and send you drifting into a peaceful sleep. I loved the surprise ending.  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Awwww... I love this one, Hoot!!!! That serenade is wonderful, isn't it? *S* |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Ruth ! You got me with the twist ! Here I thought you got lucky with a balladeer ! (not to be confused with THE Balladeer) (hmmmm ! He does profess to be a wandering minstrel)? LOL ! I really adore this ! Wonderful to see your humor, gal ! ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
hoot_owl: I liked this one lots. |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Yet again, another beautiful poem. You never cease to amaze me. I loved the twist at the end, here I thought you were talking about a man, when instead you were talking about your cat, that is very sweet. Take care, Melissa Honeybee |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Ahhhh......this is so sweet! Precious! I love the twist at the end too! Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Smiling and saying out loud, "this is adorable" Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Hoot, You had me fooled and did it well. *L* |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Hey, Ruth! Sounds like a purr-fect relationship to me!! Just make sure it's not an alley-cat  Excellent writing, btw  |
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wildbill58 Junior Member
since 2000-02-26
Posts 19 |
Hoot,i put you to sleep all the time! |
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bboog Member
since 2000-02-29
Posts 303Valencia, California |
Hoot: This is a cute poem that might be even better with just a few adjustments. I think that you repeat the word "song" too much. For example: Instead of "snuggled up close to my ear, and began to sing to me." Maybe: "snuggled up close to my ear and hummed a lullabye to me" This is your poem and I did enjoy it, then again, I am new here so maybe I'm being too direct. (Feel free to rip into my posts too- in this forum and the critical one.) Best of luck to you. bboog |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
What a funny twist at the end! You took us down one road and quickly shifted gears! I like that! Corinne |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
This is a keeper! Reminds me of my baby Tia...she was always such a comfort to me. The poem was good when i thought it was a man, and it was excellent when i found out it was a cat! < !signature--> "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot [This message has been edited by Saxoness (edited 03-05-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Everyone...thanks for reading and your remarks...glad you liked the twist. bboog...hey, I listen to any and all comments posted on my poetry. Actually I really don't care a lot for this one, but considering my lack of inspiration as of late, right now I'll take any subject matter I can come up with. Feel free to make suggestions at will, I never mind. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oh jeeze - you cat lovers can be so sneaky. just give me a good old fashioned "stupid as dit" dog that's wants nothing more than to lick my face 24-7 and I'll be happy...LOL Good poem, Ruth - ya got me! Michael |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Nothing like it...nothing at all. Such comfort. Wonderful, Ruth! K'Writing sharpens life; life enriches writing' Sylvia Plath |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
Great post Ruth...(of course, what else could I expect to see coming from u).. I always deeply enjoy reading your work. Chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thanks everyone |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
well lol, you did make me smile...I could no more sleep with a cat than a frog...but...lol this was great loved it |
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