Open Poetry #6 |
tantalus |
infinat3 sadn3ss Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 85somerset england |
Its just out of reach , the sparkling water , the juicy peach . Will it be forever ? , this agony , of having the things i need most , dangled in front of me . and i always find , in the back of my mind , the question... "what if this is as good as it gets" . foolish question , i know it is so maybe ill learn not to love the things , just beyond my reach . "all i wanna be , is washed out by the sea" |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Nice poem! Things always just out of reach can't bring happiness. Learning to be content with whatever you have can! Denise |
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mete out Member
since 2000-02-16
Posts 270england |
***Cabes honey....I hate that you are still feeling so bad - especially when things seemed to be looking up for you.... as I have said before, please don't hesitate to give me a shout if you need me, i'm crap at advice but I'm a good listener. see you soon..... I am not a preacher, I just speak the world as I see it. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Infinat3, Good words, good thoughts, good poem. |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
Cabe, the fruit has realy bloomed for you, seems you kept reaching for long enough that it paid of and the sweatness of life has just fallen in to your hand . Hope it all goes well with Jamie . Tom . With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one . |
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angelswing Senior Member
since 2000-02-10
Posts 705United Kingdom |
I have just written a poem very much like this actualy, I may post it up sometime, it's called 'lifes orchard'. With poetry as your weapon - express your iner feelings so all may carry your sorrow, united as one . |
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Enola Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 138England |
I agree with dsnyder, if you learn to be content with what you have, life does become better and it's easier to find what you want. Great poem - remember life (or you poetry) is not "as good as it gets". I think you have potential. Not that you're not good already. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Funny how we always want the things we can not have isn't it? |
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