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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN 
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"BABY DON'T BAIL" THEM ARE THE WORDS YOU SAID. WHAT WERE YOU DOING? JUST PUTTING HOPES IN MY HEAD? I DIDN'T WANNA GO SO I SAID I'LL STAY BUT THIS GAME WITH MY HEART YOU CONTINUE TO PLAY. YOU DON'T WANT ME BUT YOU WON'T LET GO. WHAT DO I DO NOW? I DON'T KNOW. *shrugz* "BABY DON'T BAIL" THAT'S WHAT I HEARD YOU SAY. YOU KNEW WHEN YOU SAID THAT I WAS HERE TO STAY. WHY DID YOU DO IT? WHY ARE YOU HOLDING ME HERE? DO YOU REALY LOVE ME OR DO YOU JUST WANT ME NEAR? YOU DON'T WANT ME BUT YOU WON'T LET GO. WHAT DO I DO NOW? I DON'T KNOW. *shrugz* "BABY DONT BAIL" IT WENT FROM YOUR MOUTH TO MY EAR. MAYBE YOU DIDN'T SAY IT AND I JUST PRETEND TO HEAR. DID THE WORDS COME OUT OF YOUR MOUTH? DID THEY ENTER MY EAR? DID YOU SAY THEM BECAUSE THAT'S WHAT I WANTED TO HEAR? YOU DON'T WANT ME BUT YOU WON'T LET GO. WHAT DO I DO KNOW? I DON'T KNOW. *shrugz* "BABY DON'T BAIL" THERE IS SOMETHING I WANT YOU TO KNOW "BABY DON'T BAIL" CUZ I'M LETTING YOU GO. |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
wow...this is great....there's a song in there somewhere....great job. "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~ |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This was great...I loved the ending...you had me wondering if you were gonna do it or should I give you the "you're better than that speech"!!!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
I agree, this would make a great song! Joy |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Gotta say,I heard the song too!  -SEA |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
god i love you guyz your all so positive i didn't look at it like a song but now that you guyz siad something now i also see it thank you *group hug* [This message has been edited by just_another_fe (edited 02-09-2000).] |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
It's a song....very lyrical, very melodious. Very well written. Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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just_another_fe Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 483MICHIGAN |
Thanx WildChild i didnt see the song in it when i was writing just writing the thoughts in my head |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"You don't want me but you won't let go" this reminds me of a relationship I was in not to long ago...and actually she did want me but only to use me and definately not for the same reasons I wanted her. Very nice writing. James |
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