Open Poetry #6 |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
I opened my heart you cried "let me in" you became the sun and I your sin Two hearts opened like flowers in sun following each other new life had begun Honesty knew no bounds petals growing with life trust was never doubted love made us man and wife papers were never signed no ritual ever took place all we had and all we knew was love in sound and space To be desired is magic as a smile lights my face to be the one that gives can only ever hold one place some loves will go on caring not as two but one as petals slowly turn their heads away from the magic of the sun... < !signature--> I dropped a tear in the ocean when it is found, I will stop loving you... [This message has been edited by RainbowGirl (edited 03-01-2000).] |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This is intimate and sweet, Rainbow Girl...I love your ~ "all we had and all we knew was love in sound and space" A beautiful ode to devotion... ~ Claire |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
RainbowGirl~ You reached out and tapped me on the shoulder-of-recognition with this one ..... 'trust was never doubted' Ahhhhh .... the key phrase. Wonderfully done, lady. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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RufffRyder Member
since 2000-02-25
Posts 143<------Over There------> |
What a lucky man he is to have his heart join yours to become one. Beautiful read Rainbow. Thank you |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent writing, Rainbow |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this is beautiful RG. You amaze me. ~shadows dance by the light within~ |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
RainbowGirl, ..... I think the last line really says it... as petals slowly turn their heads away from the magic of the sun... Loved truely. Parker |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Wow! It's great to see your spirit uplifted! This is wonderful RG! |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
the last 2 lines, the whole thing...great writing rg, and yep I know...we always write the best when bleeding the most....sigh...big hugs lady |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Good work, Rainbow gal! |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
oooh.... very hot...very wh...nice! huggsZzz |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Meadowmuse: Thank you sweetheart.. Marge: I don't believe love can exist in its purest form without trust.. RufffRyder: I think you got hold of the wrong end of the pitball *g* here..LOL Bal: Thanks sweetheart.. PS: Good to see you about again.. Haleyja: I wondered if that would make sense to anyone, guess it did.. WhtDove: Thanks sweetheart.. Corazon: Well, in my experience, hearts do best when hurting cause then they open up.. Suthern: Thanks MotherHen.. LR: WH...hmmmm, you think?.. HUGS all I dropped a tear in the ocean when it is found, I will stop loving you... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful, Cindy! Very beautiful! Denise |
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