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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap 
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"Two parts of one," we always said, when any wondered What magic held us close in love so many seasons; No end to me, nor start to you – no sooner sundered From you than I would be from breath – no better reasons Than love and hoping fueled our fire, in ample measure: But wealth of kings could not proffer A richer treasure. My dearest friend, who held my secrets in his keeping, Who knew the wounds that haunted still this tangled spirit; Who whispered an "I love you" when he thought me sleeping, Each night for sixty years – and each, I smiled to hear it – While many seemed to grow apart while growing older, My favorite place to rest my cheek Was still your shoulder. We were the force unstoppable, the flame undying; Though demons danced and angels fell, still we persisted: And threats of failure never held us back from trying – We met the challenge hand-in-hand, and double-fisted. From disappointment and defeat emerging stronger, For such would just postpone success A little longer. The children came as children will, with wonder brimming -- Infusing everything they touched with life and laughter – We watched them as they grew, our fire never dimming, And helped them to believe in happy ever after; We spun the twofold thread not even Fate could sever And wove it through the tapestry That spans forever. But Time is an unyielding foe, a brooding cancer, Who weights with age the youthful legs which once were agile; And knows the way to steal the dancing from the dancer: The twofold skein reduced to one is doubly fragile. Where Fate had faltered, Death prevailed, with chilling fingers: Yet though your hand is gone from mine, Your vision lingers; Now every breath awaits the shade who stole the living From out my life; who claimed the essence of my dreaming – Pernicious Time has proved a victor unforgiving, Who dulled the eyes which once with love for you were gleaming -- Yet though your flame has cooled to ash, and mine to embers, You'll burn forever in my soul: The heart remembers. Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
oh this is incredible....what a love, what a tribute...reduced me to tears, this is beautiful....elegant.... |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
"The heart remembers". Another wonderful piece from a truly talented writer. I always enjoy your work! |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
"Yet though your flame has cooled to ash, and mine to embers, You'll burn forever in my soul: The heart remembers." Absolutely wonderful. This poem flows so smooth it nearly reads itself. This is one of your finer pieces and you have so many of them  I really, really enjoyed this. By the way, have I told you yet I liked this piece |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
This was amazing Kess...the strength of love, throughout even the ultimate death...I hope to find this some day!!! Totally breathtaking Kess!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is incredibly lovely... how wonderful to know such a love!!! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Poetic perfection, Kess...simply that. ~ Claire |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Kess, this is the most wonderful thing that you have ever written. . . there just aren't enough words to tell you how much this has touched and moved me. . . You have always been an inspiration to me Kess. . . and this poem is one of the reasons why. . . Much strength and love to you my friend. . . we can only hope to find this kind of love that you write about now. . . --------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I am awe struck by this glorious poem! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oh, you have left me in awe before but this poem moved so deeply within me it brought tears to my eyes and flutters to my chest. I know not what to say, Kess. Purely exquisite. Michael |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Kess, Unbelievable, I held my breath at every verse. I am honoured to have read it. Parker |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Skyfyre~ This is of the purest love, the gentlest heart. This is wonderful. -SEA |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
I have missed your postings, but the wait was certainly worth the exquisite poetry with which you have graced us. Beautiful. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Once again, you have honored us with magnificent poetry, Kess. This is very well written.. ( but you don't look a day over 55... ) |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kess~ Sublime poetry. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Skyfyre: As I wipe away a tear, the heart does remember. Your poem was magnificent. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Skyfyre, Exquisite, this is a true epoppe. |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
Corazon: Thank you -- if anyone should know that the "heart" remembers, it would be you. Danny: I'm blushing!  Ruth: Your ebullience is a compliment of the highest order. Your reply made my morning. devina, suthern: Don't we all wish that we could find a love like this -- but as you can see, it can be bittersweet ... Claire: It is the goal to which I aspire, but I hope I never reach it, that I may continue to strive! Sven: Your replies never disappoint. Thank you my friend, it is for replies like yours that I write at all, I think. Martie: Blushing again! Michael: I was going to say something about getting a swelled ego here, but since I am pretty sure your comment was sincere, I will simply say thank you. Such a compliment from such a talented poet is extremely gratifying. Haleyja: Honoured? Wow -- that's a first! How wonderful! SEA: Indeed, and thank you for your reply. Mike: I've missed being here -- but sometimes life interrupts, yanno? I'm glad I didn't disappoint ...Balladeer: You silver-tongued devil! Jeez, I'm turning 26 on Sunday, so glad I don't look over 55!  To tell the truth, I wrote this about my grandparents -- my grandfather is very ill, and I am trying to bring myself to accept the eventuality of his death. Then it ocurred to me that the one I should be worried about is not myself, but the one who is his other half -- I tried to imagine what it would be like to love someone for so long and then lose them to an undefeatable enemy ... and this is what emerged.Marge, Gemini, Seymour: You are too kind. Thank you for reading. Smooches all, and thanks for putting up with me ... --Kess |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Well I've searched and searched... but for just this instance, I can think of no smart-alecky remark to make. This is too heart-felt of an empathization here. To know such a bond, I think, is what we all must be searching for. And to be able to express it in such eloquent words exceeds the bounds of imagining. You've outdone yourself here, my friend, with a tale of heartfelt triumph... though 'tis a remark to bring tears that their earthly paths could soon seperate. That they've experienced so much leaves me comfortable knowing that in the life beyond this they'll be together. For how could such a bond be broken by something as trivial as death? [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 03-06-2000).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
bravo....bravo....bravo Kathleen--(Kay) |
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