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Martie

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0 posted 2000-02-28 08:26 PM

(a repost from ....youth's passing??)

On Passing my Youth

I see her reflection
in the store window.

A girl sits alone
contemplating the sidewalk.
Dark curls hide
the curve of her cheek.
The sun shimmers in her hair
like fireflies on a moonless night.

Her toe taps on the cement
belying her calm,
telling of a small turmoil,
the heart beat of first love,
the anguish of the search.

I see the curve of her hip,
the round beguile of her breast,
her lips delicate as petals,
her eyes bright with longing.

I see her dream,
dancing in graceful abandon,
the effortless flow of energy,
the silken, slither of her youth.

Have I left behind that time
of bare shoulders,
that time of miracles
and heavy breathing?

I smile
at my reflection
in the store window.

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2000-02-28 08:57 PM

Martie~
How do you do that?
Every time ... just the perfect words
to convey the beauty of your thoughts.

I particularly liked the subtle ending.
I smile at your reflection too.
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Mike
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2 posted 2000-02-28 09:13 PM

Beautifully done...

Denise

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3 posted 2000-02-28 10:05 PM

Ah, yes, I remember this one! I still love it!! Very beautiful, Martie!!

Denise

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4 posted 2000-02-28 10:42 PM

I can certainly relate to this one. I love it, Martie.

First__Knight
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5 posted 2000-02-28 10:57 PM

A reflect of you I see in this writing as you see you in the window. I like this

Cerenity
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6 posted 2000-02-28 11:40 PM

This was so beautiful, such a wonderful ending, and so vivid thank you.

cerenity

Martie

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7 posted 2000-02-29 01:52 PM

Thank you all for your kindness in replying to this poem.

hoot_owl_rn
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8 posted 2000-02-29 08:59 PM

Beautiful

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