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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Come under my leaves and let me shade you Plant yourself next to my heart For like the sun I cannot touch you I would burn while giving you life And when I called out your name There was no one who really heard me And I waited but you never came In my tears I nearly drowned You can take a leaf and put in your hair Any garlands that I could give you, And any fruits for you I bear If only I could speak and tell you I grow from tears that I shed, Even if you think I am dead |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
"And when I called out your name There was no one who really heard me And I waited but you never came In my tears I nearly drowned You can take a leaf and put in your hair Any garlands that I could give you, And any fruits for you I bear If only I could speak and tell you" ...I think that I shall never see...a poem as lovely as a tree...(smile)... another sad but perfect one... wow, that makes 4 in one afternoon...your gonna spoil me  ...you must really be inspired.thank you! stalk ya later...JM |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
These were all written back in '87 or so, when i was in high school. Oops...i dated myself. You gotta stop making me blush now.... |
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January Flowers Member
since 2000-02-01
Posts 209South Carolina |
Whether appropriate or not, this poem makes me think of one of my favorite authors (no joke!), Shel Silverstein, and his book, "The Giving Tree". Your poem is really well written, and vacantly sad. Sigh. Good Job, and thanks for the memory of one of my favorite reads...think I'll dig that one out and share it with my kids again! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
JML, I'm so glad I saw this today! I nearly missed it! I've read it three times thus and with each reading enjoyed it all the more. Absolute beauty...and you wrote this while in high school? *shaking head* My goodness... Thank you for sharing it with us all these years later!  ~ Claire |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thanks Claire! Most of my posts are from that era. I think I see myself getting better, or at least different, changing. I was less cynical back then like everyone else. I never would have thought someone would read them these many years later. Thanks. |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~JML almost missed this one, so glad I didnt. I loved this poem!! AND you wrote this in high school? you go boy i loved the symbolism and imagery. You paint a picture with your words. thanks so much for digging this one up and sharing itamy ~Live today as though it were your last but prepare for tomorrow as though it were here~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I think it's neat that you've still got poetry that you've written from younger days. I wish I did, sometimes, just to be able to look back and see the progression. (at least, I would like to "think" it's been a progression!) Everything that I wrote while in high school and college (back in the Stone Age) was lost in a fire, aside from a few published works. Be sure to preserve your work as best you can...you never know when you might want to share it, publish it, or just read it again. Take care, ~ Claire |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
JML~ what a lovely poem. -SEA |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Wow....this is my favorite of any of your poems I've seen. You've done a wonderful job here expressing your feelings and it's a great poem. I really think you should send this out somewhere. Excellent post |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thanks everyone. And Hoot, I just started trying, but no takers on publishing. |
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