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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa 
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Am I so cursed to see tomorrow when others fail to look just one day I’d like to borrow a page of their story book. And after every word was read id tear the page in spite than lose myself inside my head as thoughts begin to write. So many pages left undone I’m running out of ink. who died and made me the one to suffer as I think. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
As usual, great wording and rhymes, and also very dark and almost bitter. I remember when I started, I couldn't seem to find a sense of humor in my writing, though I had plenty in real life. With such a smiley photo of you next to your poems, there's a sort of irony. I'm not knocking your work though; far from it. I am saying, though, feel free to spread out whenever, and if ever, you're ready. I'm excited to see what you could accomplish. Mike |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
All great thinkers suffer, Kevin. You'll get used to it!.....hehehehehe...but seriously, you are a very gifted writer, Kevin. And unfortunately, thinking is a prerequisite!  Denise |
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CrazyChick Member
since 2000-01-05
Posts 132 |
Great work |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oh, the curses of foresight. What a life it would be to not have to "think". Great poem, Kevin. Just a side note...you're a much better thinker than you would be a lemming...LOL Michael |
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Kevin
since 1999-11-02
Posts 729Torrington, Ct, Usa |
whose to say im not a leming! hey guys thanks for the replies but one of us should get to bed lol! goodnight guys |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
A lemming would never go to bed without being told, Kevin... G'night. Michael |
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myslinky Junior Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 27 |
This is a great poem. I can relate to thinking way too much into things sometimes i get out of hand and lose sight of whats important. Loved the poem. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kevin - As usual ... you spin a good one. Mystery ... intrigue ... just you. Inside your head the stories, inside your heart the ink. ~*Marge*~ |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Kevin...bitterness, yes, but tempered with wisdom, and wonderfully crafted. Very well written.  Claire |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
understanding this yes |
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