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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Trusted TrespassTrusted trespass, enfeebled fouling few. Despoil morning's child, once ivory innocence she knew. Ill vacancy, noiseless night becomes her hue. Now pardon past her, as she inconveniences you.  Claire |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This says it all, Claire! Very well written. Denise |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Denise, thank you for reading and commenting...I appreciate the feedback. Claire |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I went back to read this twice.... Nice one...  |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
Got it, second time through. Good choice of sounds. Well done. |
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simplyYRREHS Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 162 |
oh Claire! Caught me with the title...splendid writing! Can be manipulated to mean a grand array of things...LOVE IT! Sherry |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
This is wonderful Claire I like it |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Great reading, Claire. Powerful piece. Michael |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Wonderfully done. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
You write about the terrible crime of sexual abuse in such a beautiful way, but still leaving the wrenching feelings of despair Good work |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Oh my...incredibly powerful. Magnificent piece of writing, Meadow. It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
I have to addmit I had to read it twice before i came to realize Then still i was unsure what I just read Now I know It is so sad Well the style you write Makes others think.....twice Thank you for sharing such incredible work The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Andrew Scott Member Elite
since 1999-06-24
Posts 2558Redlands,CA,USA |
Harsh subject, handled well. Like the style of presentation and writing. Fine title as well. A solid piece all the way around. I bow to you and yours. |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Claire, this was so sophisticated in its presentation. The message begged to come out, but the writing was so tight that I had to really think about what I was reading. I loved the genious behind this fine piece of poetry. So powerful and direct! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
You pack so much into this space of words--emotional and powerful. Well done! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thanks, everyone, for your kindhearted responses. I'm glad you found something to like about this poem. Claire |
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Grandma Jo Member
since 2000-01-02
Posts 51 |
Gotta admit that I too read it twice. Very nice piece, very well done! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Thank you, Grandma Jo, for taking the time to read, and respond so favorably. Claire |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cool write |
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