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blueyz75 Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 138IL |
Control Empty abyss swallowed my soul, that was the day I lost all control. You walked in my life so cocky, I didn't know the road ahead was rocky. Given a choice I'd not choose another, even if I had to put up with your brother. He kept secrets that tore us apart, I knew I loved you from the start. I didn't foresee where we would go, we had such a long row to ho. To walk along the path with you, that is all that I wanted to do. You were my heaven on earth, your love was like my second birth. Making me feel alive, even now our love will survive. In my heart I carry your soul, your the man who shot my control. Kelly Maria Kosa Wednesday, January 12, 2000 All rights reserved This is my first post in this area, I don't think it fits real well in the spiritual room. Kelly I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
if ever a poem described love's ups and downs..this is it...nice poem.. |
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blueyz75 Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 138IL |
Well right now, foregoing a minor miracle, it's been buried at the lowest low. Not much I can do about it. Kelly I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
I know well those feelings, dear. Welcome to Open! I was hoping you'd pop in, Kelly. See what a bit of persuading can do? ~giggle~ Welcome, welcome!  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Nice poem, Kelly! Sometimes things are out of our control, huh? But miracles do happen! Denise |
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blueyz75 Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 138IL |
It got a little lost in. It got busy. Makes it so you can't see all that you want to see! You guys are going to have to slow down and not be so creative! or spread yourselves out! Kelly I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I like the line about love feeling "like a second birth"... good one, Kel... |
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blueyz75 Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 138IL |
Thanks everyone....this will probably get lost in here somewhere! and OH, I went thru his town the other day but didn't stop. To chicken! Kel I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Heaven on Earth...what a picture you paint!!! I could feel you on this one!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Sweetheart: I don't think antibiotics are gonna fix this one, but you can...you have the remedy... HUGS Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
I liked this cuz....I can completely relate to a few trying times in my life....guys seem to always be able to shoot our control!! LOL!! Thanks!! Take Care Bridgette |
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blueyz75 Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 138IL |
I'm very flattered guys! Thanks for all the responses. and Rainbow, I tried everything within my power the first time to do it all right, and nothing worked. I lost! In the process my heart broke. That I haven't been able to fix yet, just try to forget most days and keep going. I'm to scared to pick up the phone! Kelly I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
"your the man who shot my control" amazing how guickly that can be shot sometimes. You've expressed your emotions very clearly in this one |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Kelly, I think Marge has some band-aids you can use for your broken heart *hugs*Liked the poem, I can relate ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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blueyz75 Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 138IL |
Uh bandaids? I needed a full blown disaster control crew when it all intitially happened. Bandaids wouldn't even have started to cover all the problems that happened then. But that is in the past, and I'm here now, although be it alone, looking to the future. Kelly I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman |
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Lost Dreamer Member Elite
since 1999-06-20
Posts 2464Somewhere near the Rainbow |
You described your feelings very well with this poem, none of us knows what lies ahead in the future, you could be amazed. Hold your head up high and keep a positive outlook, the stars will sprinkle down upon you when your not looking. |
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d.schultz Junior Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 43 |
Wonderful Poem My best advice for someone who has been down the same road... TIME... it does heal all |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Kelly, I felt your emotions in this one, Well Done!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Dear Kelly I know you feel alone right now, but yes time does eventually heel and a new love will come your way. tracie |
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blueyz75 Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 138IL |
MMMM lets see, new love, still waiting. And isn't three years enough time? I am not intentionally turning men away..hell I'd have to find them first to do that! And I absolutly refuse to search for love on the net! hehehe Thanks guys! kelly I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman |
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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap |
LOL -- yes, I know all too well how caring for someone can upend your control ... and I am a control freak, so you can imagine I really go off the deep end when it happens to me! Talk about a study in extremes! Marble to mush in three seconds flat -- LOL Good stuff here, Kel -- glad you finally decided to peek in on the wolves' den that is Open ... LOL --Kess Full fathom five thy father lies, Of his bones are coral made, Those are pearls that were his eyes; Nothing of him that doth fade But doth suffer a sea-change Into something rich and strange... --William Shakespeare, from The Tempest |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
Very powerful and well written I enjoyed this one very much! |
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blueyz75 Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 138IL |
Sometimes, as much as I want control, I also want someone to come along and help me out, to take some of the crap off. I love the independant feeling but hate that "alone" feeling. Kelly |
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