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Of Oaks and Roses
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Of Oaks and Roses |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Of Oaks and Roses Sitting in near silence hearing only the drone of some far-off tractor making ready for the spring planting season She worries about her own garden, covered in weeds, wasted by neglect over the past years of her life Memories are filled with coffee and cigarettes drugs and alcohol pain and anger Tomorrow appears in the window, its face a cancer, menacing her daring her to take on the living of day-to-day and the planting of new oaks and roses, laughing at visions of strength and beauty or even a future at all She takes a long, deep breath, closing her eyes Slowly, slowly her eyes open again , looking directly at tomorrow She raises her fist, then one by one, her fingers bare her palm, revealing three seeds in her hand One acorn One rose One woman Tomorrow fades, knowing it won't be seen until it grows into today © caroline 2000 It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Caroline, You seem to be inspired or I'm seeing you in a new light? Your poem is magnificent. An epopee. In this one your talent is really showing. *L* Sy |
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blueyz75 Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 138IL |
As a gardener, I loved that piece. My garden nurtures my soul as I nurture it. Kelly I love the male body, it's better designed than the male mind.---Andrea Newman |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
The seeds you've sown with your heart blossum freely in this verse. Well written Caroline, beautiful poem  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I love this whole poem, of course - But, caroline, your finale packs some serious punch.... Very nice, indeed!! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is so touching, two great symbols of strength and beauty. There is so much in this poem. It's very well written and says so much Liz |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I loved this poem! And agree with Nan that the ending packs quite a punch... Well done! |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
Dont ever sneek your poetry pieces in with out telling me. One acorn One rose One woman Tomorrow fades, knowing it won't be seen until it grows into today loved the end. Ps who is the cute chicken on the left |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Read a comment from some high falootin poet type on the net that said anyone who uses roses or trees in their poetry was not worthy of reading... (read one of his poems and I thought it stunk) I kinda have a thing for roses and oaks... enjoyed very much... an excellent poem. |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
My friend, you hold much promise within your hands. Glad I am to have read this verse. Now and forever, my heart hears ~one voice~. DreamEvil© ------------------------------------------------------- "Either kill me or take me as I am, because I'll be damned if I ever change..." Count Donatien Alphonse Francois de Sade (Marquis de Sade) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderfully done and those last lines left me breathless. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Caroline, this is very well done. I'm not sure which is more striking....the poem or your picture. I'll call it a draw.  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I agree! A beautiful poem as well as a beautiful picture! Your poems are always a pleasure to read! Denise |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Sy~~Thank you! Praises coming from a talent such as yourself, I'm humbled Blue-I love to garden too. I agree there is nothing like it to nurture the soul! Hoot & Nan~~Thanks muchly, ladies...always means a lot when you like my work. (Nan that punch is spiked LOL) Elizabeth- That I could write as beautifully as you do is a dream for me! Thank you Suthern...You and I have the same kind of poetic mind, I think! I love all of your poetry...it always makes me say Now why didn't I write that!  MR UKHERO!! *LOL* You were working, hon, not supposed to be reading poetry! hehehe.. chicken? That's that mother hen that sends chicken soup and hugs to you!! Mike~~you know what I say to those high-falutin' types don't ya? PFFFFFFFTTTTTTT!!! (The Big Raspberry!) I'm with you...I love trees and flowers, and reading/writing about them. Thanks for reading mine! Dream~~thank you, love. You know what I'm going through and your support has meant the world to me. Martie-thanks so much! Your poetry always leaves me breathless with its beauty Balladeer! You DRAW too?? My God, man you are multi-talented aren't you! Can you sing and dance too? (heheheh) Thanks, sweetie  Denise~Thank you, my dear. Your poetry is always a joy to read, and your responses are so appreciated. (how do you do it? C'mon...tell!) It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Wow, Caroline. This is a lovely piece. Exceptional imagery...and symbolism. Indeed, the last lines are exquisite. Michael |
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