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a keep upon distant hill... |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... 
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Asher Keep A thought occurs to me, like lightning as I watch my wife and her mother drive away off to church dressed in their Sabbath finery. Sitting on the porch bundled in Navaho poncho fresh coffee and morning smoke; the dogs out back complaining about having to stay home, the birds by dozens flocking to their home-made feeders, laughing at the cats stalking- showing their aerial frustrations; ah yes, our life here is fulfilling. Warm, crisp January morning in the Oklahoma woodlands My wife and her mom smile I see their lips moving from behind automobile glass, discussing me... no doubt! A few compliments a helping hand with braided hair and off they go into the morning; ah yes, our life here is fulfilling. A thought occurs to me, like lightning as I watch my wife and her mother drive away on Sabbath morn... a simple yet profound realization of how very much I love them. DJBurt 1/99 (all rights reserved) there is only one... Romans 10:9-10 |
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Kid Pedestal Junior Member
since 2000-01-04
Posts 26Chandler, Arizona |
I can almost feel your thoughts and emotions while reading this. Very Nice. Kid Pedestal [This message has been edited by Kid Pedestal (edited 01-11-2000).] |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Daniel - This is really very nicely done. ~*Marge*~ |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Yes...the love shines through clearly |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Your poetic simplicity here so expressively portrays the depth of your sentiment. A wonderful, early morning missive.  Claire |
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Bbuzz Member
since 1999-12-17
Posts 76Washinton State |
I can picture your morning easily. How Clear! And isn't it funny how those moments of love just come out of nowhere and isn't it neat when they do.You have been blessed obviously! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I was sittin' right there with you on the porch! Great poem!  Denise |
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PhaerieChild Senior Member
since 1999-08-30
Posts 1787Aloha, Oregon |
Hi Bro I remember Asher Keep. Great poem this is. I can see Mom amd Wendy Woo right now discussing you and your many foibles. LOL Love ya...Sis Poetry~ Words falling on paper, painting a dream. Shawna R. Holder Boise, Idaho |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
i'm totally amused... one works one's fingers to the bone for over thirty years perfecting one's craft...getting the phrasing and word play and structure just right! And the poems which impacts others are the ones that just jump onto the page...go figger! Thank you all for the wonderfull gift of irony... there is only one... Romans 10:9-10 |
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