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Night Riders |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA 
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Slowly through the darkness Two gray shapes moved forward on Neither bearing likeness Neither straying, forward on. They move in time to nothing Slowly riding forward on Riding on gray horses Moving constant forward on. No sound escapes from them Moving silent forward on. Not one thing between them Still they're moving forward on. Perhaps they'll reach their goal Moving always forward on. And find peace for their souls Moving on toward the dawn.  Knowlege tempered by wisdom...Wisdom tamed by youth. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Very good , I liked it  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Repetition of the 'forward moving on' line makes this feel like a ride in truth..very rhythmic! I like it.  |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This is haunting, compelling. The rhythm (and equine reference, admittedly) reminds me of "The Highwayman." I enjoyed it very much. |
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U K Hero Member
since 1999-08-08
Posts 266England |
yes I liked this also, very fresh. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very rhythmic in it's nature...I couldn't help but think of..."Onward, onward marched the five hundred..." |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
This is great! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I felt like I was along for the ride! Well done, Rob! Denise |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Thanks all! The more I wrote the more monotonous this one got, so I had to end it with the dawn in sight. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Life is a never-ending cycle RS< I think you ended it perfectly! |
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Tamera Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 121 |
Well done! |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
You have definitely captured the perfect pace for this poem Great use of the repetitive phrase. I enjoyed the read much!It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Femme's Father Member
since 1999-10-30
Posts 58Carrollton, TX, USA |
Sounds like this was a depressing day,from "zero" up to "forward on", what comes next? Mom You impress me with the way you can express yourself in all facets of the emotions. Be it high or low or anywhere in between, you do an excellent job. Love your thoughts, feelings, and poetry. I feel, if I'm not wrong, that this poetry forum has been like a good medicine unto your soul. You sure have contributed some excellent renderings for all to read. It seems the more you share, the more you get and all good things come down from the Father above. James |
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RSEvans Senior Member
since 1999-10-23
Posts 1147Tulsa, OK, USA |
Not really so much depressed as post-Christmas blues. I wish the two of you could have stayed a little longer or that I could have gotten away to go to Rogers for a little bit to see Grandma but it didn't happen. As for New Years, I'll be off Friday but have to work 10 hours on Saturday and maybe Sunday due to Y2K. I think they expect the world to stop and if it does I might step off and see if I can fix it. |
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