Open Poetry #5 |
The waterfall |
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
The Waterfall Deep within a canyon sprawl, In dancing, leaping, splashing fall, Living waters' cavorting bright, Shunting sun and sculpting light. A vision of art to the eyes, That makes for many heavy sighs. With music to the listening ear, Exploding, charming, splashing cheer. I love the bubbling spray and dance, Enchantment of each moments chance. And ever a sprinkle touches me, I feel a sense of ecstasy. Natures palette painting bright, Whispering song throughout the night. Brings my eyes to tear inside, In exquisite sort of pride. There is no finer joy or wife, Then recognition of this life. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Yes!, My very own feelings. This is a WONDERFUL poem, so full of life. There's something about perpetual motion of water that is so mesmerizing. Youve delighted me with these verses Liz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
The flawless rhyme and meter of this piece make for a far smoother flow than the waters of which you speak. Nice one SY |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Well done. I enjoyed the ride. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Especially liked the last two lines--but the whole poem of course was excellent. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
This one is very nice, Sy....flows well. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This has an enchanting quality. Very lovely, Sy!...again, *sigh* Denise |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Like water falls from mountain high Your words are flowing well...dear Sy A master truly with each word and line reading this is true waterfall devine Excellent and very well done So close to nature you have come Thanks The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Thank you, what you say about the water is true, it does mesmerize. Love Sy Hoot, With your words I will sleep well tonight. *L* Mike, Thank you for the well done. Balladeer, Thank you for the ok on this one. Denise, Thank you for the enchanting. *L* Helmut, Love your little poems, thank you. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Had to read this one again to start off my day with a fresh sense of life Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Thank you for the extra read I'm glad in filled your little need. Love Sy |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This is beautiful, Seymour!! Some of my best hikes have been to waterfalls... though my feet sure do drag when it's time to leave cause I love 'em! *G* |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Magnificent work, Sy. A true expression of the beauty in life. Michael |
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patchoulipumpkin Member
since 2000-01-01
Posts 196Bermuda |
this is a great poem, so well written, wow. |
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Quiet Lightning Member
since 1999-12-26
Posts 56 |
I liked this poem especially the third part of it. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Has anyone ever told you that you meet our expectations, and then some? Thank you! Sunshine Look, then, into thine heart, and write ~~~ Henry Wadsworth Longfellow |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
This does indeed flow - a waterfall of words. Hey - can I hold my cup beneath it and catch some, Sy? - well done, well done, well done. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suthern, Thank you for the beautiful *L* Michael, Thank you for the beautiful comment. Patch, Thank you for the WOW. Quiet, Thank you for the nice comment. Sunshine, Very sweet Sunshine. *L* Severn, Be my guest by all means. *L* |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thought I'd start off my day with a waterfall today Liz |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Sy, this is wonderful , what a nice poem I like it |
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