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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704
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~Awaken~ I know slow risings fragile things dreams perhaps or feathered ripples simple returns and wishes a sigh or two not above me no they soft slowly rustle me unrevealing of their frame dare I allow them near? Turn whispery thread of mystery into tangibility …I know not… should I move around them just shadowed unseeing safely or… awaken …awaken… |
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Paul Hoekman Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 382Harwinton Ct. U>S>A> |
How completly enjoyable, the words, the format, the feeling. LOVE IT! Paul |
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Betty Gravitt Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 222Georgia United States |
Awaken Severn, and enjoy.  This is beautiful. Thank you.B Gravitt |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Severn , This is wonderful Really loved the read Thanks Julie |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This was truly delightful to awaken to. Severn, I have no words left for your talents. They seem to only get better, but I don't know how You are amazing Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, Well I just got up and your poem snapped my eyes open. What a delightful suprise and poem Beautiful my dear. *L* Sy |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Good morning, Severn! Awaken! Beautiful poem! Denise |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
I love the way you formatted this! It adds so much to the poem. Oh yes, and the poem itself is really quite superb too.  Keep writing, I'll keep reading!  May I never be too busy to help another's load, Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed. --Author Unknown |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh, this is so lovely Kamla. So few words and so much beauty expressed. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Lisa Graham-Marshall Junior Member
since 1999-12-31
Posts 23Nottingham. UK |
'Sigh' Lovely words. |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
This was wonderful Severn. Very well crafted. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
This is beautiful and written with excellence Severn...... I love it!!! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
A very beautiful, dreamy poem, K, you have reason to be proud of this.  |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Most Beautiful Kamla, Excellent work, beautiful words captured me!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Lovely poem Kamla. I really liked the way you layed this one out. You do have quite the talent. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh Kamla...do awaken, life is too short to sleep through the best years |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oh wow, this one gave me chills. That impulsive side in me is screaming AWAKEN... but I fully know the flip side of that dilema as well. Your imagery astounds me at times, wonderful work. Michael |
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Felix Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 78USA |
I think I would like to see your eyes. Bt that and your poetry...it would be an amazing discovery. Great work! Did you ever read about a frog who dreamed of being a king, and then became one? - Neil Diamond |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
The best part of waking up........ |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Paul - thankyou very much! Betty - thankYOU for reading, and that is what I am trying to do. Whiskey - Same as above! LOL  Lizzy - Well, you know the feeling is mutual - I never do want to sound trite when telling you how much I love your latest poem - but it can't be helped because I have run out of words! Thankyou.Masterpoet - why thankyou, I do appreciate it! Denise - and it is the morning! How can I not but help but awaken when I come here. Thanks.Satiate - you have a deal - and the same goes for you - thankyou! Martie - thanks my friend... Lisa - thanks, haven't seen much of your work yet, but will be looking out for it. Marilyn - thankyou... Shannon - your reading is always welcome with appreciation my friend - thankyou. Sea - my dear, I thank you. Dark - let us just unite in affirmation! Thankyou my friend.Eloise - you must also tell that to yourself OK? Thanks hon. Ruth - LOl, I know! Thanks. Michael - thankyou - I knew you would understand the dilemna! Felix - wow, really? Thanks! Nan - hehe... < !signature--> '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath [This message has been edited by Severn (edited 01-08-2000).] |
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moonmoon Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 277TX , USA |
Wow K,that was breath taking indeed. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You set a wonderful mood with this poem, Kamla. By all means, awaken! |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Awaken me with the likes of this any morning WonderfulBeing in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you" |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nice, little one. Enjoy what you write very much. Love ~Marge~ |
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caroline Senior Member
since 1999-08-16
Posts 1218http://members.xoom.com/belladona123/index.htm |
Ahhhh.....Kamla, Kween of FreeVerse Absolutely one of your best, friend! Breathtaking in its loveliness It's not the love you fear, but the fall from the height~Edwin McCain |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Dear moonmoon - so nice to see you! Thankyou. 'deer - why thankyou, I do have a hard time of it sometimes... FKnight - OK! Bowing my thanks, Sir Big hugs to you, my poetic sister ill. Get better soon. Thankyou Mistress best - haven't seen anything from you lately...foot tapping here... Thankyou! |
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mirjam Member
since 1999-11-24
Posts 246Auckland, New Zealand |
oh kamla what's your secret? (i know i know - the vessel thing, but really kamla how the heck do you keep producing such fantastic poetry???) Well please do awaken, i agree with the others - sometimes it can be harder than what you think, but then again sometimes it can be easier too! Hey my friend thanks for sharing another of your masterpieces. P.S you still haven't emailed me your butterfly poem! P>P>S bring in your cv to work and mark will put a good word in for you because we convinced him how desperately Bennetts needs and wants you!!! Hurry girl hurry! |
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