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Haunted by the wrong
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Haunted by the wrong |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Haunted by the wrong It struck me like an ocean shoal. A floundering ship with gaping hole. I thought of heaven, I thought of hell. But mostly I stood there in a spell. And thoughts just cuff me all at once, I'd been a fool, I'd been a dunce. I let her go, without a thought, I let her go, now I'm distraught. And the tear that set my eyelid sill, Ran down my cheek as another one fill. As her spirit walked across my chest And bellowed the load within my breast. God I miss her like a force, She was no angel even coarse. Had little looks and less of charms, But filled the hollows of these arms. She rubbed me wrong she rubbed me rough. I plagued her soul with never enough. Now she is gone and past her song And I am haunted by the wrong. She is past and gone and to, her song. And I now live with the bad and wrong. |
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Unknown Poet New Member
since 2000-01-05
Posts 7Sumner Washington |
Hey, This a good poem! I really like it! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I think we can all relate to those haunting moments...regrets from the past. I know I can! Well done, Seymour!  Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is so beautiful, yet heartbreaking. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Heartbreaking Seymour, good poem though ! |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
One of those...."oh oh now what do I do?" poems. Been there! RB |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Heartbreaking indeed, masterpoet - hugs to you. You write beautifully, no matter the topic. (hey - you know where I am if you need me OK?) K '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, This is so lovely in it's phrase but sad. I hope it's not the poet who is tormented. But you express the torment so beautifully Liz |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I give you ~HUGS~ Sy, cause if she left because you wanted more attention, you dear man have the strength to carry on. Remember we start to know ourselves a little better inside each time a relationship fails! Hang in there hun! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I give you ~HUGS~ Sy, cause if she left because you wanted more attention, you dear man have the strength to carry on. Remember we start to know ourselves a little better inside each time a relationship fails! Hang in there hun! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
See how much I care?--I even posted that twice!! Well at least my blonde moment should make you grin a lil bit right?? Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
WOW Seymore, you just keep getting better, not that you needed to to begin with, but each new one surpasses the last. Wonderful work!! |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Sometimes we make decisions that seem right at the time.... and just don't turn out to be the best for us.... Nice job, Sy.... |
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Deborah Junior Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 41 |
Beautiful and sad at the same time. Wonderful poem, great description of how you felt. Deborah |
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Tamera Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 121 |
Sy, So well done..regrets are hard to live with, yet a lesson learned. Tamera |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Unknown, Wonderful comment, thank you. Denise, If you can relate then the poen is a success. Martie, Thank you Martie *L* Sy Munda, Thank you Munda Sy RobertB, Good comment, thank you Robert. Severn, I know where you are and you have my *L* Elizabeth, A poem is a poem, is a poem. You have my Email Thanks for the wonderful comment. Love Sy Devina, Enjoyed your double comment, That just showed the poem was good. A double thanks. Hoot, And your comments keep getting better and better, *L* Sy Nan, Nice job from you just sent me to cloud nine. *L* Sy Deborah, Wonderful comment, thank you. Tamera, Your comment makes the poem a success, thank you. |
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Betty Gravitt Member
since 1999-09-11
Posts 222Georgia United States |
Seymour, I know this feeling very well. Thanks for this. I needed it. I like your poems, and they do keep getting better. ((((HUGS)))) B Gravitt |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Betty, Thank you Betty enjoyed the comment and the hugs. Sy |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Whether or not this is truth or fiction, you have the ability to leave the reader always believing "fact", and left hurting with the ache... Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow |
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