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Seymour Tabin
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0 posted 2000-01-05 10:15 PM



    Haunted by the wrong

It struck me like an ocean shoal.
A floundering ship with gaping hole.
I thought of heaven, I thought of hell.
But mostly I stood there in a spell.

And thoughts just cuff me all at once,
I'd been a fool, I'd been a dunce.
I let her go, without a thought,
I let her go, now I'm distraught.

And the tear that set my eyelid sill,
Ran down my cheek as another one fill.
As her spirit walked across my chest
And bellowed the load within my breast.

God I miss her like a force,
She was no angel even coarse.
Had little looks and less of charms,
But filled the hollows of these arms.

She rubbed me wrong she rubbed me rough.
I plagued her soul with never enough.
Now she is gone and past her song
And I am haunted by the wrong.

She is past and gone and to, her song.
And I now live with the bad and wrong.

© Copyright 2000 Seymour Tabin - All Rights Reserved
Unknown Poet
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1 posted 2000-01-05 10:27 PM


Hey, This a good poem! I really like it!
Denise
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2 posted 2000-01-05 10:29 PM


I think we can all relate to those haunting moments...regrets from the past. I know I can! Well done, Seymour!  

 Denise


Martie
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3 posted 2000-01-05 10:30 PM


This is so beautiful, yet heartbreaking.

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

Munda
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4 posted 2000-01-05 10:45 PM


Heartbreaking Seymour, good poem though !
RobertB
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5 posted 2000-01-05 11:35 PM


One of those...."oh oh now what do I do?" poems. Been there!

RB

Severn
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6 posted 2000-01-06 12:30 PM


Heartbreaking indeed, masterpoet - hugs to you. You write beautifully, no matter the topic. (hey - you know where I am if you need me OK?)

K

 '...I want to be free - free to know people and their backgrounds - free to move to different parts of the world...' Sylvia Plath

Elizabeth Santos
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7 posted 2000-01-06 02:45 AM


Sy,
This is so lovely in it's phrase but sad. I hope it's not the poet who is tormented. But you express the torment so beautifully
Liz

devina
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8 posted 2000-01-06 02:49 AM


I give you ~HUGS~ Sy, cause if she left because you wanted more attention, you dear man have the strength to carry on.  Remember we start to know ourselves a little better inside each time a relationship fails!  Hang in there hun!
devina
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Cali
9 posted 2000-01-06 02:49 AM


I give you ~HUGS~ Sy, cause if she left because you wanted more attention, you dear man have the strength to carry on.  Remember we start to know ourselves a little better inside each time a relationship fails!  Hang in there hun!

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

devina
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Cali
10 posted 2000-01-06 02:50 AM


See how much I care?--I even posted that twice!! Well at least my blonde moment should make you grin a lil bit right??

 Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

hoot_owl_rn
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11 posted 2000-01-06 03:12 AM


WOW Seymore, you just keep getting better, not that you needed to to begin with, but each new one surpasses the last. Wonderful work!!
Nan
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12 posted 2000-01-06 09:14 AM


Sometimes we make decisions that seem right at the time.... and just don't turn out to be the best for us.... Nice job, Sy....
Deborah
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13 posted 2000-01-06 09:37 AM


Beautiful and sad at the same time.  Wonderful poem, great description of how you felt.
      Deborah

Tamera
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14 posted 2000-01-06 02:07 PM


Sy,
So well done..regrets are hard to live with, yet a lesson learned.  
Tamera

Seymour Tabin
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15 posted 2000-01-06 02:34 PM


Unknown,
Wonderful comment, thank you.
Denise,
If you can relate then the poen is a success.
Martie,
Thank you Martie *L* Sy
Munda,
Thank you Munda Sy
RobertB,
Good comment, thank you Robert.
Severn,
I know where you are and you have my *L*
Elizabeth,
A poem is a poem, is a poem. You have my Email Thanks for the wonderful comment.
Love Sy
Devina,
Enjoyed your double comment, That just showed the poem was good. A double thanks.
Hoot,
And your comments keep getting better and better, *L* Sy
Nan,
Nice job from you just sent me to cloud nine.
*L* Sy
Deborah,
Wonderful comment, thank you.
Tamera,
Your comment makes the poem a success, thank you.

Betty Gravitt
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16 posted 2000-01-06 02:52 PM


Seymour, I know this feeling very well. Thanks for this. I needed it. I like your poems, and they do keep getting better.
           ((((HUGS))))


 B Gravitt



Seymour Tabin
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17 posted 2000-01-06 05:30 PM


Betty,
Thank you Betty enjoyed the comment and the hugs. Sy

Sunshine
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18 posted 2000-10-29 07:57 AM


Whether or not this is truth or fiction, you have the ability to leave the reader always believing "fact", and left hurting with the ache...

Karilea
If I whisper, will you listen?...KRJ



passing shadows
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19 posted 2004-06-06 01:55 PM


wow
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