Open Poetry #5 |
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Confrontation |
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Dreamer_556 Junior Member
since 2000-01-04
Posts 34 |
Confrontation The sorrow that I feel is deeper than the darkest ocean. The questions I need answered are higher than the highest mountain. My imagination runs wild, playing tricks with my mind. I sense things that I cannot see, making me quiver with fear. Dark images formed in my head project on every corner. He’s chasing after me like an evil creature of the night. Running fast, I am reaching dead ends; soon I will be confronted. Loud shouts, clumsy footsteps echo treacherously around me. I know I am guilty, I know I cannot hide forever. Yet I shall keep running, until one day I am found by him. Please let me know what you think, and any ways I can improve this! I am proud to say - this is now my second piece! ![]() ~*Dreamer*~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
I am not a poetry critic, Dreamer, but I think this is magnificent! Wow..your second poem! You sure are talented! ![]() Denise |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Another good one, Dreamer! Just hope you really arent being chased by this mysterious something! Corinne |
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Kid Pedestal Junior Member
since 2000-01-04
Posts 26Chandler, Arizona |
Your poem is almost a reflection of my thoughts, and so holds a great respect in my mind. |
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Dreamer_556 Junior Member
since 2000-01-04
Posts 34 |
Thank you, yet again, for replying! Corinne.. I think the mysterious 'something' I am running from is my conscience !! Denise, thank you very much for that kind comment! I find it very hard for people to take me seriously due to my age, so thank you ALL very much. Kid Pedestal, I hope you are made to feel as welcome as I was! |
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