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One Man no Man
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One Man no Man |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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Standing at the edge Of a life that used to be But never was, Looking out for that horizon But I'd rather catch a buzz, One man is no man I know I am no man Now I know Now I know Damn ashes Burning my fingers again, Is that my soul Burning? Can't make it to work again. Flying in the wind, Falling into the sand, The water carries her away Like she never was, Can't get her off my hand My mind Whoever said we get to be happy anyway? What entitlement do we have? 2 years or 10 What difference does it make? What do I teach my son about being happy though? She asks—doctor 'we have to stop' How can I teach my son what I never learned what I never felt what I never was How can I teach my son? What used to be And never was But the sun keeps rising I am no man Lost in the sand (this was written in Feb 99-- I'm having a good day.. honest!) < !signature--> How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius [This message has been edited by Local Rebel (edited 01-05-2000).] |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
LR: Nice you're philosophical today...it's superb! I must be in your mind today, figuratively speaking..  HUSG Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
fiercely philosophical I would say, this poem says so much about strength...and yet the lost feeling comes through so clearly...wow...excellent work my friend |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yes, I agree! This is excellent! Denise |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Roooooooooll another one..just like the other one....but ya can't catch me....Nice work "hawk".... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'd rather catch a Buzz, too.... but he's an elusive critter! *G* Seriously (like that comment wasn't? *G*)... I liked your poem much! Well done! |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
I can always count on ol Toe for a Buzz...LOL Thanks friends. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Excellent!! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Well...you're certainly something in my book...it take something to write poetry like this. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Nice to see you on a serious note for a bit, great poem hun! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Tamera Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 121 |
Very good!! Enjoyed! Tamera |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Gotta love that versatility.... |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hawk This was really deep - like some of your other work. Ladies - in case you didn't know - old Rebel is about as versatile a guy as you will ever meet. He's truly all class. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
He's truly all what?......Did ya press too hard on the keyboard?...That "Cl" kinda just typed by mistake?...... [This message has been edited by Toerag (edited 01-06-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
ROFL@Toe!! I think the poem is great. It sets a tone and a mood easy to feel, almost melancholy in its style. Well done. |
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