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**Remember Me**
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**Remember Me** |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali 
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Remember me as the dawn comes, when your soul is aching anew, when I no longer justify myself, remember my love for you. Although I'm the one letting go, it's just as painful of a goodbye, there now stands a starless heaven, remember there are two that cry. Memories of us are etched along- my soul in firery grains, I will always have a love for us, please remember me just the same. Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Sad and beautiful, Devina. Full of emotion! I love it! Denise |
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Bojopy Member
since 2000-01-03
Posts 391 |
So true to heart upon a break up of any kind!!!!! Very sad........Bojopy |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Letting go can be so painful. I like this, especially the line "remember there are two that cry."  Claire |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
So sad, but very beautiful devina. I really enjoyed this poem. |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Nicely written, devina, but if a woman lets me go, I'll do my best to forget her as soon as possible and, if I can't, she'll never know that. |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Heartbreakingly beautiful. *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Sad but a beautiful poem  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Devina, Balladeer, is right, why dwell on the past when the future can be so beautiful. |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
Deer and Sy- I know you two are right when it comes to forgetting. This was a poem I wrote right after my ex fiance and I broke up. I was trying so hard not to hate him. The newest feeling is very bitter I must say, as you will read in my next posting. By this poem, I only tried to let everyone know that I haven't always felt such bitterness towards him after we broke up. Thank you all for your comments! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Beautiful poem and well-written! Nathan |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
dearest, I will always remember... How can I ne'er forget. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Very nicely written devina -- and you have a soft mellow side too!  |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
This is very sad and beautifull. Endings bring new beginnings. I don't know if this is a good time to bring this up, but does this mean your single?  |
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d.schultz Junior Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 43 |
I liked the poem... I can relate to the passage "I will always have a love for us" |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
I enjoy your poem very much. |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
It's never easy to let go If it circles around love Well written Sad do. The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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lucky Senior Member
since 2000-01-17
Posts 1601Idaho |
you write so wanderifly that I just had to tel ya. lucky |
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One Who Understands Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 251Cedar Rapids, Iowa |
Wonderful way to put such a sad reminising |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Very sad Devina,yet very beautiful! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is very beautiful Devina |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Tanya, this was a great read. Excellent poem! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
I want to thank everyone, I had NO idea this would touch so many...so often heartache brings us all together thanks again!!!Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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