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Some Thoughts on Free Verse
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Some Thoughts on Free Verse |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Some Thoughts on Free Verse It's not the easiest thing for me writing poetry in a form that has no form when rhyming verse has always been my device for baring my soul it was something I understood well so simple so precise so comfortable and neat it is quite easy to funnel thoughts into a neat package the step ahead of you well defined a footprint that fits your shoe perfectly all you do is match a thought with a rhyming word and make it fit the rhythmic mold it's like music the lyrics matching the tune a game of filling in the blanks it was quite easy for me one who studied the languages the portuguese and french the mandarin and castilian all the exact words for exact things memorized sounds that always fit into the mold of syntax But free verse is a freefall into an infinate space with no defining boundaries the invisible rules of FREE and I feel like I'm jumping off the edge of a pier into a lake for the first time my eyes tell me to jump but the foot wants to cling to the boards afraid of the unknown unable to see below the surface of the dark waters and I miss that footprint of thought that always told my words where to go and how to fall into place but now I am FREE falling into the newness of poetry I always thought free verse meant that you have to know where to start and where to end but now I see that poetry is the heart speaking and how do you tell a heart where to start and where to end you don't it simply knows and the poetry flows Elizabeth Santos |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
...and this flows beautifully! Well done, Elizabeth! Another form that you have attempted and done very well with! Denise |
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Balladeer
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
There is no form that you would not excel in, even a formless one. I am a structure poet, personally, but I can certainly understand the difficulty of writing good free verse every time I attempt it. I just prefer the net up when I play tennis. This is excellent, Liz. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Brave lady and you did well. But then anything you attempt always flows so nicely. I have a most difficult time with free verse so I don't attempt it often. |
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Eloise Senior Member
since 1999-11-27
Posts 1096Wyoming |
Elizabeth, I am so sorry. My telephone rang and cut me off when I reconnected my message was resent and resent! However, there are never enough nice things to say about your poetry. Again, I apologize.  LOL - No problem, Eloise - I was deleting them as fast as you were posting 'em.... teamwork, ya think?...  [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 01-02-2000).] |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Well, Elizabeth.... I have to agree - I have to format my poetry too..... You've done a great job here.... Most of these guys have seen my feeble attempt - but maybe you haven't..... I am lost and foundering without my rhyme. I wonder how you write free verse. I hear iambics in my mind. I see rhyming, miming, words in timing. (oops!) I want to structure each of them I am lost and foundering without my rhyme. I pretend to let words freely flow I feel the need to write a sonnet. I touch more hearts with my pantoums. I worry not when penning villanelles I cry no tears when quilling paradelles (oops!) I am lost and foundering without my rhyme. I understand we each have styles to write. I say that this should surely be all right (oops!) I dream pentameter at night (darn!) I try to write in free verse, but I can't. I hope to meter my next quatrain I am lost and foundering without my rhyme. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, You have rare talent, and constantly amaze me with your writing. I am in awe of your abilities. There is no meed for me to tell how good this poem is. Just keep well and keep writing. Love Sy |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
I like how you have brought your thoughts forward and speak of the diffuclulties of free verse and as you do you write it free versed. So very well done Liz. Where on earth can you go now Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you" |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Denise, Thanks, dear and keep me posted! Liz Mr. Balladeer, I dream in rhyme. I think I'm a wierdo that way, My conversations are verses and everything rhymes. If I wrote like Kamla or Martie, I'd prefer free verse But I like the music of rhyme and meter Thanks Liz Eloise, With comments like yours, you may post as many as you want, my dear, Actually, if you hadn't said something, no one would ever have noticed. Thank you so much Liz Nan, Sy and First Knight, Thank you all, fine poets This poem is not intellectual, but it is sincere Liz Nan, I like your poem. You are a poet of my own heart! Liz [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 01-02-2000).] |
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Shrinking Violet Junior Member
since 1999-12-20
Posts 35 |
I am new to Passionate Forums and so, do not know your rhymed work. All I can say is that you seem completely at ease in the wilds of free verse. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Have I created a monster Well done...maybe this will express my thoughts on your verse better Words effortlessly formed in liquid motion with pen of ink and written down line by line for us to sink our teeth into Manna is created and we feast on your soul as it feeds life into us You pour out your heart and it dribbles into letters that work their way into ours |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Liz, Your so talented I know anything you write is just great and free verse is just another form for you to write just how you feel , this is another great post from you, well done Julie |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
the talents that show, here in the land of never be rhyme are those to be envied and awed! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Violet, I have only ever written in verse, this is my 3rd attempt at free verse.Thank you very much for reading and commenting Hoot, If you like it, that makes me happy. If you knew me, you would be as startled as my family. because I never wrote anything in my life, and have trouble even expressing myself verbally. So this meansa lot to me and I thank you for your help in bringing out the wall flower Liz Whiskey, You are very kind, my dear, but you must also realize that all of you have been my inspiration. Thank you. Liz Christopher. I am at a loss of words for you, young man, for I am so in awe of your work, so if you like my poem, it makes me smile, Thank you Liz |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
I can relate to the trepidation of writing free form , though with this poem it appears that you've begun to reconcile any reserve you've had, and very creatively, I might add. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Such a talent you are Elizabeth...this is excellent! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
I feel about free verse the way you feel about the rhyme--it falls into place so easily for me, whereas the discipline of rhyme and meter totally baffle me. You did this very well Liz, it flows like a breeze, effortless and free. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
(blushing)  Wow, I compliment your poem and get an incredible compliment back! You m'dear are too sweet! |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
Well, everyone else has said it all, I can only say Ditto! Well done |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This does flow wonderfully....I love free verse...it's all I know...structure fo me is constraining...I feel suffocated...and then get all worried that I'm not going to fit the right mold!! So I just do my own thing!! Thank You...I really enjoyed this a lot!! Take Care Bridgette |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Bridgette, I want to thank you for resurrecting this poem simply because I never saw several responses as the poem slipped away. Since this, I haven't ventured back into free verse. i'll have to try it again Thank you so much CLAIRE, Sorry I missed your comments on this, and thank you for your kind remarks Liz PEPPER Thank you, young lady MARTIE I hope you happen to see this, you are one of the queens of free verse. I am still in awe of your work, and feel honored when you compliment my poetry Thank you SEAANGEL Sorry I missed this response and I thank you Liz |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
your piece marshalled the thoughts i have struggled with for years, thank you. my goodness so many poets who never sleep! Is it a non-paying occupational hazard? laughing into the beard while, bleeding there is only one... Romans 10:9-10 |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
You of the rhyme and the flow have just kissed a breeze with your freeverse voice and you of the flowers and fields and words gloried through form have given a gift to the craft of loose art... well done Sister poet. (Hope all is well - in my thoughts and prayers) K |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Bleeding, I never struggled with these thoughts til I met Kamla and Martie But at any rate, I may just tru it again sometime, This is an old poem back from Dec. It's time to try again Thank you Liz Kamla, OK, dear,you can stop showing off now, knowing that I can never catch up to you. Imagine, responding to my poem in an exquisite free verse. Of all the nerve. hehe I'll talk to you later on tonight Love Liz |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
HUMPH!!! Showing off...SHOWING OFF!!!!? Whaddya mean 'can't catch up' anyway? And what do you call your poem? It is WONDERFUL!!! Tchtch - going to have to beat some belief into you, methinks...  Love you back...K |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Elizabeth, my friend- Like you, I think in rhyme. Not necessarily measured ... but a pinch of this and a pinch of that Once I stirred the pot I found I liked it when the chute failed to open and I found myself falling into free-verse. ~~~ As you jump into each new realm of rhyme I find you free falling everytime Exhilaration personified as the chute fails to open and somehow you manage to float perfectly effortlessly to your mark I do believe you've earned certification in free-verse or perhaps just using your ~*~wings~*~ Love ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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