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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Fantasies goal She walks the high wire of illusion. And I fear sometimes to catch her eye. To cause an unbalance of delusion. To throw persistence off its lie. Equilibrium must reign supreme. To keep the stability of the norm. Balance is the heart of regime. It must prepare for any storm. I would fly with her the fantasy mirage, And phantom a camelot cosmos. I would lie with her in this dream collage. And enjoy the happiness of emboss. I would toll the bells of freedoms cry. And sail with her to a nowhere abode. I would build a tower in the sky. And make it part of my life encode. I would live the life of an Ibsen soul. If we could but join in fantasies goal. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
On this one, Sy - I like the opening metaphor best of all......  |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
This is great Sy!!! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ Love is such a lonely art, and death is but a taste. Minds are merely instruments that often go to waste! ~*~ ^i^ ~*~ |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Fantasies can be wonderful! So is this poem! Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Oh my...this one leaves me speachless. Wonderful!!!! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, This is a great poem, as I've been calling your work lately, it's "classic Sy". That greatest of verses I know you're capable of writing. And you have produced so many lately. This one should also go into your first volume, I believe Liz |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Well, this is just perfect....absolutely gorgeous Sy... You certainly are a Master and I agree with Liz, your work should definetly be published... A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, I agree with you on the first stanza thanks, *L* Sy. Echo, Great is great, your pretty good yourself. Denise, Your comments always make my day. *L* Sy. Hoot, Oh my from you makes my heart go pitty pat. *L* Sy. Elizabeth, You are my greatest fan and I love you. If you have been printing out my poems, you probably have the first volume. What I should be doing is saving your poems and my replies. Now that would make for interesting reading. Love ya Sy. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sy, another beauty. '...and sail with her to a nowhere abode...' - sigh...love that line, my friend. K...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Severn, Love your comments and you too. Sy |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Sy, This is great another wondeful poem Julie |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Whiskey, Thank you much for the nice comment. Sy |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
Seymour, I really like this one, I think it's one of your best. As Nan pointed out, the first verse reaches out and grabs you. Nice work. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Fred, Since you are one of my favorites I give you a large thank you. Praise from you, is praise indeed. |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
"And phantom a camelot cosmos" Verbing your noun here is brilliant. Very nice work indeed. How much more grievous are the consequences of anger than the causes of it. -Marcus Aurelius |
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Tamera Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 121 |
Seymour, absolutely beautiful! Fantasies are wonderful! Tamera |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
Sy this is great.....I love the line..."I would toll the bells of freedoms cry." You have out done yourself here Being in love with someone is more than just saying "I love you" |
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poetFemmeFatale Member Elite
since 1999-07-25
Posts 2646Arkansas |
Ah Sey, the 3rd stanza told me you are a man of many marvels! Are you married? If not, I do fear your list will be long now! Fabulous read to say the uttmost least! Applauding your ability to lull me into a lover's lare! hehe ** I'm reaching for the brightest star I've ever seen - knock my ladder out from under me, and you'll wish you hadn't !! -pFF ** Here's to 2000! |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
This is graceful, potent poetry.  Claire |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Local, Wonderful comment, thank you. Tamera, Thank you for the read and comment. First, Enjoyed your comment. PFF, Would I, Could I, turn the clock back, I would be there on horse, bareback. But I've been married so long I can't remember being single anymore. *L* SY. Thank you for the beautiful words. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy, your poetry always touches me in a place I cannot go myself, but know-- the rhythm, the rhyme, the place, the time, soooo sublime. In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
In fact - this is a 'I really want to print this' one...s'alright with you, Sy? K...I am not a painter, I am a poet... F. O'Hara |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, Your making me blush. *L* Sy Severn, Your wish is my command, of course. *L* Sy |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Seymour, there isn't much poets that use words the way you do and I mean that. Great poem once again. Nathan |
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