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Dr.Moose1
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0 posted 2000-01-01 11:45 AM


Relentless cold draws warmth from bone
Labored breaths fuel feet of stone
Leaden skies shade all to gray
As the night o'er takes the day

Weight of burdens carried far
Those within the more so are
Combined almost too much to bear
Would they were expelled as air

Crystallized by frigid blasts
Encrypted in the ice of past
Left behind entombed in white
Forever driven from minds sight

Plodding steps may find new ease
Warmth return by kind degrees
Vast expanses travelled light
If convinced what's done is right

© Copyright 2000 William E.Kleist - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 2000-01-01 11:54 AM


Wonderful, Dr.Moose! Happy New Year and may all your burdens be light!

 Denise


hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
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2 posted 2000-01-01 01:05 PM


WOW...never know what to expect when I open up one of your postings   I Liked...incase you couldn't tell  
Echo Rhayne
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since 1999-09-17
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Canyon Country, CA
3 posted 2000-01-01 02:05 PM


wow, wonderful!

 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~


Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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northern mountains, Idaho
4 posted 2000-01-01 02:23 PM


This is excellent!  Delicately worded, beautifully rhyming, poignant and haunting, I love this poem!
Dr.Moose1
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5 posted 2000-01-01 03:27 PM


Now that my head is sufficiently swelled from all of your kind remarks ...here goes.

d.
Glad you enjoyed this , as I have so many of your postings .
hoot,
Likewise , as I am most often pleaseantly surprised by yours.
Echo,
Thanks , at the risk of sounding redundant ,
I have also enjoyed your writing too.
Rosemary,
I've only read a few of your works (recently)
but have enjoyed the insight shown.Your comments are much appreciated.
Doc


sandgrain
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since 1999-09-21
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Sycamore, IL, USA
6 posted 2000-01-01 05:00 PM


I was almost shivering as I read it.  Great work.
Dr.Moose1
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7 posted 2000-01-01 11:16 PM


a sandgrain ,
Being feeble minded
And running out time
I for one am glad you took
Time out for my rhyme.
Doc

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07
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Tamarac Fla
8 posted 2000-01-01 11:24 PM


Doc,
Your poem is as solid as a rock
And my heart it did unlock.
Your rhyme and verse is very good
And every word I understood.
*L* Sy

Astraea
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since 1999-11-09
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9 posted 2000-01-01 11:27 PM


Wow.  Lovely!  I can't imagine much more to hit so close inside with writing.  Very beautiful.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."


Dr.Moose1
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10 posted 2000-01-01 11:44 PM


Sy,
Thanks . At times the distance between head and heart seems shorter , although I have no idea why .
Doc

Dr.Moose1
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11 posted 2000-01-01 11:49 PM


Astrea,
Thank you . Anyone who's carried a load needs to set it down once in a while .Your comments are appreciated .
Doc

Nan
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12 posted 2000-01-02 09:35 AM


Hey Doc.... I love reading your "read" poetry... You've always got a great message to tell..... You need to post more of them..
Dr.Moose1
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13 posted 2000-01-02 10:45 AM


Nan,
Always good to hear from you , and as soon as I can get what's rattling around in my head on the screen I'll post it .Never know what I'm gonna find in there next .

Alison
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14 posted 2011-03-26 02:07 AM


I am one of your followers too and I like this one.

A

Dr.Moose1
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15 posted 2011-04-06 08:04 AM


Alison,
Thanks much. Back in the day I sometimes took things a little more seriously ( myself included ), boy am I glad I got that out of my system, lol.
Doc

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