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Relentless Cold
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Relentless Cold |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Relentless cold draws warmth from bone Labored breaths fuel feet of stone Leaden skies shade all to gray As the night o'er takes the day Weight of burdens carried far Those within the more so are Combined almost too much to bear Would they were expelled as air Crystallized by frigid blasts Encrypted in the ice of past Left behind entombed in white Forever driven from minds sight Plodding steps may find new ease Warmth return by kind degrees Vast expanses travelled light If convinced what's done is right |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Wonderful, Dr.Moose! Happy New Year and may all your burdens be light! Denise |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
WOW...never know what to expect when I open up one of your postings  I Liked...incase you couldn't tell |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
wow, wonderful! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This is excellent! Delicately worded, beautifully rhyming, poignant and haunting, I love this poem! |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Now that my head is sufficiently swelled from all of your kind remarks ...here goes. d. Glad you enjoyed this , as I have so many of your postings . hoot, Likewise , as I am most often pleaseantly surprised by yours. Echo, Thanks , at the risk of sounding redundant , I have also enjoyed your writing too. Rosemary, I've only read a few of your works (recently) but have enjoyed the insight shown.Your comments are much appreciated. Doc |
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sandgrain Member Elite
since 1999-09-21
Posts 3662Sycamore, IL, USA |
I was almost shivering as I read it. Great work. |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
a sandgrain , Being feeble minded And running out time I for one am glad you took Time out for my rhyme. Doc |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Doc, Your poem is as solid as a rock And my heart it did unlock. Your rhyme and verse is very good And every word I understood. *L* Sy |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Wow. Lovely! I can't imagine much more to hit so close inside with writing. Very beautiful. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Sy, Thanks . At times the distance between head and heart seems shorter , although I have no idea why . Doc |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Astrea, Thank you . Anyone who's carried a load needs to set it down once in a while .Your comments are appreciated . Doc |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Hey Doc.... I love reading your "read" poetry... You've always got a great message to tell..... You need to post more of them..  |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Nan, Always good to hear from you , and as soon as I can get what's rattling around in my head on the screen I'll post it .Never know what I'm gonna find in there next . |
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Alison 
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I am one of your followers too and I like this one. A |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Alison, Thanks much. Back in the day I sometimes took things a little more seriously ( myself included ), boy am I glad I got that out of my system, lol. Doc |
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