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An Acrostic Sonnet
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An Acrostic Sonnet |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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In the Wake of a Millennium A Prayer for my Sponsored Child May happiness be yours throughout the year Beside a warming hearth of love and care In safety and in warmth and free from fear Content in faith, and love in God's aware Protected from the hands of evil souls Enriched by all the wonders you embrace Not ever deviating from your goals To learn and live with pride upon your face And may your loved ones find prosperity May each one seek to find a better way Equipped to conquer life's severity These are the things I pray for New Years Day Embrace these blessings from a loving heart Roberto Carlos, son so far apart Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 01-01-2000).] |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
A beautiful Prayer I hope it all comes to be life for your sponser child  |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Smiling...what a wonderful prayer Liz... check your e-mail |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Just beautiful Liz...... Have you sent this to Roberto? A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thanks for the comments I am happy in the structure of this verse but not the poem itself. I wrote this so hurriedly, but this could be more fluid and more beautiful a sonnet. It doesn't sing to me, and that's what poetry should do, especially a sonnet. I've got a long road ahead yet to master this form, but I appreciate your comments. Thanks Hoot for the e-mail Liz |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
It sings to me, Elizabeth! Excellent acrostic, too! Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I'm humbly bowing to the Queen of Sonnets Thanks, Denise |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Absolutely beautiful! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Excellent sonnet, Elizabeth. Jim "If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Elizabeth, we're usually our own worst critics... You're no exception... This is a lovely sonnet...  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Echo and Jim, Thanks so much Nan, appreciate your help and your comments Thank you Liz |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I think you made Nan's day with the Iambic pentameter thing. I agree with her though, you are your own worst critic, this is very good. Michael |
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