Open Poetry #5 |
The Knowing |
TomS Junior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 32 |
The Knowing My minds eye holds pictures Clearly as the day A young woman of lovely features Before love seeped away Once solid as granite How could it so dissolve Was in the taking for granted My lack of clear resolve For I did not know then What I now know I would never be forgiven For stemming your loves flow I have reaped As I have sown When death up to you sneaked In my presence you felt alone Was then you became hard And I realized My hand held not the card Nor the love in your eyes I still remember My heart still fells the shame Like the winds of December How I blew out the flame |
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jaxjoy Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 112Texas |
nice work......I especially liked the first stanza. |
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Tamera Member
since 1999-12-28
Posts 121 |
So sad and beautiful.. I enjoyed this...my can definitely feel it.. Tamera |
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Songbird Member Elite
since 1999-12-15
Posts 2184Missouri |
Very nicely written, beautiful and sad. I especially like the last few lines. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Yes, this is sad and beautiful! Well done, again, Tom! Denise |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Beautiful work So sad , Well done |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Touching |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
How sad. I can connect with this one. Very lovely, very beautiful. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Beautiful!! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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