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Opening His Letter (First Attempted Sonnet)
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Opening His Letter (First Attempted Sonnet) |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania 
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Couldn't fool anybody with this acrostic OPENING HIS LETTER Will this letter leave me ever still In quiet peace of mind and happiness Laughing once again in childish thrill Letting out a cry of joyful bliss How can he not respond my tender love Ever present in my quivering voice Can he at last sing out the song of dove Openly announcing its rejoice My heart now trembles in its deep engage Enveloped in white his poetry Too afraid as I unwrap the folded page Opening now the truth it holds for me My heart gives out a tender sigh Ecstatic in his lullaby Elizabeth Santos [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 12-30-1999).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
i hope he will come to you  nice verse! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
wayoutwalt, should be called cleverwalt, Thank you! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Lovely poem Liz.... < !signature--> A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon [This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 12-30-1999).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Elizabeth, Your answer is in the question And a question in the answer. A beautiful poem. LOve Sy |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thanks for the comment, pepper Sy, And a question is in your answer Thank you liz |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Very nice first try, Elizabeth... Now we just have to get your iambics into pentameter.... Great poem, indeed... |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thanks, Nan, I'll look it up and do it. This is why I call this the Passionate School of Poetry. Liz |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sigh! In the dew of little things, the heart finds its morning and is refreshed. (ee cummings) |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Very nice poem Elizabeth and an excellent first attempt, but as Nan said...work on your meter a bit or cheat and just don't call it a sonnet  |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Thanks, Hoot I've got to find out what you two are talking about. I never had a course in poetry so I'll look for this information on the net and see what I can do. I have a lot to learn. But you don't learn if you don't try. Thanks for the comments! Liz OK, I read about iambic pentameter and I get it now. Thanks Nan and Hoot [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 12-30-1999).] |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Well I think it's a job well done Liz At the touch of love everyone becomes a poet. (Plato) ~Isis~ (Daughter of Mystery) |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Beautiful, Elizabeth! Very lovely and a great acrostic! Denise |
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Echo Rhayne Senior Member
since 1999-09-17
Posts 1495Canyon Country, CA |
Pulchritudinous! ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~ |
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