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I'm Sorry
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I'm Sorry |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia 
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I'm sorry i've been so selfish lately and haven't given you my time You've shown me your loving attention when you really needed mine So here I am to say how sorry I really am And to give you my support in any way I can So can I be forgiven for being so self absorbed And to you my selfless one, it's you that I applaud |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
thankyou tracie for sharing this thats the nicest way you could say to people ' I care '  Rex}<{{{{o> |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
okie,i am new to poetry so what i am writing here is just my own personal feelings....hope you don't mind i feel your poem is rather more like prose in some parts,maybe it will be better if you go like this: you gave me your attention, when you really needed mine... your poem is kind of vague too---more details of how this person cared for you will be better,eg He sent me flowers when i was sick to give solace to my wounded soul.... i agree with Rex---this poem is the nicest way to show someone you do care.... |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Rex thanks for your sweet reply kaile welcome to passions thanks for your reply and I will keep it in mind all comments are well worth reading...Tracie |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
How's that old saying go...Love is never having to say you're sorry |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Heartfelt words that I'm sure will hit their mark! Denise |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Thanks Ruth and Denise for your kind reply's..Tracie |
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