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Island Vine & Rare Vintage (two poems one post)
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Island Vine & Rare Vintage (two poems one post) |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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Island VineThe island vine writes grapes in Rolled up messages Jammed in seafaring bottles Remorse code Tapped out on Telegraph keys Tap, Tap, Tap, tap tap tap Tap, Tap, Tap, on Tenterhooks she waits as bottles wash on Barren shores Readers drink taps and slashes razors red and black nails, desire and thirst lust in crimson verse they Drink drunk from shore borne bottles and thirst again more more but they Leave her on her island like forgotten grapes a Tear falls like silk on the tigress cheek she waits for someone to drink her instead of crushed lexis pressed from her broken heart The island vine Withers As her fruit multiplies Leaving nothing Before ashes Rare VintageShe drinks like Italian on tongue Wine She is hard Glass like a bottle Corked to the world She stings with A dry wang But he Needs the nails And plum Red Crimson He needs a strong Full Bodied nip He needs her soft Succulent sips That hide Like wine Behind glass Translucent A grape easily bruised He drinks her full Hate is a dead thing. Who of you would be a tomb? -Kahlil Gibran |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Intoxicating, I'll grant you that. (liked the "remorse code") Claire |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thanks much Claire...  |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
The best "wine" I've had in years dear man!!!! Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Rebel- Once in a great while a piece comes along that stuns me. This one does. I can't even find the exact words to tell you just how perfect I find this. Rare Vintage may do it. But, then ... even rarer than that. So full-bodied with yet a subtle bouquet. Stored this one in the cellar. If you haven't guessed by now ... I find it rich. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
I'll have to agree with Marge. Very rare vintage, these two verses. I savored them both equally. Nice work Liz |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Intoxicating verse here........very well done  |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
These are both beautiful, LR! I enjoyed them immensley!  Denise |
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Breathe~ Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 315Washington... |
Have to admit...your name drew me in... but your poems kept me here... Very nice... ) |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like both of these very much, LR... though I think the first is my favorite of the two... if only because I've tapped out that remorse code a few times myself... and the wait for a response is agonizing. *S* |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Thanks so much everyone... glad you enjoyed. Hate is a dead thing. Who of you would be a tomb? -Kahlil Gibran |
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Iloveit Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121NM |
liked these much rebel, you have a unique way of drawing images that make them so real, you leave one of your poems with the images still flashing...great work |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
hey can I just ditto Iloveit, she said it almost perfectly ROFG and eating those dang cookies again this morning great work though, really |
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