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Skyfyre
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since 1999-08-15

Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap

0 posted 2000-02-05 12:55 PM

Immolated angel,
~resplendent Love! ~
Aloft on brightly burning wings
to set the sky aflame;

Triumphant her cry,
and with hypnotic note through raptured heights resounds,
To allure, to compel,
~to demand ~
Ashes spreading in her wake, the swept remains
of heart's kindling,
Burnt offerings upon the granite shrine.

And there lingers in her shade
~despair ~
~pain ~
Carrion crows rejoicing in raucous cries
As they feast with bloodied beaks upon her slain.

Plucking at hollowed eyes
~empty ~
~haunted ~
Perhaps these once burned with life, with hope, with joy,
but now only shine to mirror her glory, knowing
That only eyes may hold her.

Unmake the soul,
~dispel ~
~deny ~
Proffer no prize for her taking, and watch
with heart unmoved as she sounds her siren song,
Remembering,
~knowing ~
That to smolder sighing in her fiery grasp is still

To burn !

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Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...

--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest

[This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 02-05-2000).]

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2000-02-05 01:01 PM

Skyfyre, Wow! That's pretty heavy! Very intense. Liked it a lot!

-SEA

Local Rebel
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-21

Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia

2 posted 2000-02-05 01:04 PM

By Jove I think she's got it...

so nice to see you free!!!

'Carrion crows rejoicing in raucous cries
As they feast with bloodied beaks upon her slain' -- powerful lexis m'lady

Hate is a dead thing. Who of you would be a tomb? -Kahlil Gibran

Denise

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since 1999-08-22

Posts 22648

3 posted 2000-02-05 09:27 PM

Wonderful job you did on this, Kess!

Denise

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

4 posted 2000-02-05 09:43 PM

Wow, this is a powerful poem

Elizabeth Santos
Member Rara Avis

since 1999-11-08

Posts 9269
Pennsylvania

5 posted 2000-02-05 10:26 PM

How did this one slip past me. I think I was watching those Northern Lights. Anyway, perfect poetry here, as I expected.
Liz

Christopher

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Member Rara Avis

since 1999-08-02

Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration

6 posted 2000-02-06 02:21 AM

Incredibly powereful imagery here m'friend. Love the usage which is your trademark. I do have a few suggestions, (nothing BAD, just suggestions,) which I will relate to you person to person like!

Awesome!
Free verse likes you!

Poet deVine

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

7 posted 2000-02-06 06:57 PM

Ack? Does that stand for Astoundingly Creative Kess?

This is submission material if ever there was any....it's wonderful... I love it.

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

8 posted 2000-02-06 07:14 PM

This is wonderful Kess!

HelmutB
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since 2000-01-06

Posts 964
Canada

9 posted 2000-02-06 08:26 PM

Cannot add much everything has been said
So I just let "Extraordinary" be the add
Well done Kess, very well

The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

10 posted 2000-02-06 09:01 PM

Awesome.
Enjoyed the imagery very much.

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