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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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-sadness- Sometimes, sadness is comforting, familiar, Like a favorite blanket, choicely unraveling. Hunkering in front of the television screen, We live out lives of friends and neighbors. Other times, sadness is beautiful -- its sheen Casts light over darker recesses, crevices, Problems and permutations of problems, To remind us nothing is really wrong. Sadness can be the ticking of a clock, The scent and taste of raspberry cake. A favorite mistake Rolled on the tongue. Written out in words, sung out in song, Trimmed to fit situations. Clipped expanse; short, long. But right now, sadness is overbearing. Lifting me, lurching, down to the ground, Where among soil and petals, trash, I feel dirty, useless. Bound. The trick is to find joy Even in something as small as a bee. The trick isn't a trick at all. It's beyond fork tines piercing raspberry. It doesn't crumble, candles don't sit in it, On it, or beside. It's not about the color of lights, How fast you can go in your ride. I'd like to say it's all about love, But even that I'm not sure. I will say it's something Barely felt, Something clean, unbroken. Pure. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I really like the lines-- "a favorite mistake, rolled on the tongue" and please, spike if you're reading, DON'T take that out of context! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
I simply love it when someone presents me with a thought I never would have thought of myself .... 'The trick is to find joy' 'It's beyond fork tines piercing raspberry.' Beautifully done. Thank you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
And thank you both for your comments. I've been feeling a lot off lately, and for some reason, that seems to translate into my good poetry. Mike |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Interesting and thought provoking piece. I enjoyed this! Denise |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
Mike, this piece is quietly moving. I like how you've given sadness validity, a place all its own in our spectrum of emotions. I often use sadness as inspiration to write. On a personal level, it's been a sad time, of late, and what better than to embrace sorrow and reflect upon it, contrasting it with our other emotions, and through the movement of doing so, begin to heal. I am impressed with how you shared this. Thank you. Claire [This message has been edited by Meadowmuse (edited 02-04-2000).] |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
I Have and still do relate to this. The sadness is felt in each line and each situation. I like this very much. In or out of context. Rich |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks for all your kindness of my poem, and even more importantly, your understanding. I've been feeling down all this week -- that plane crash really shook me up. Here's to better, or at least happier, feelings soon. Mike |
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