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Nicole
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since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835
Florida

0 posted 2000-02-03 02:34 AM


We together
In stasis – our world
Thoughts intermittent sent
Heard by you
I hear

Nascent
Yearning – a love to be born
Our love
Ubiquitous, so great as to witness
Raven’s tears in fear of such joy
Amassed from naught but
Relishing the gifted
Melody of your
Smile

I caught within
A
Maelstrom of brilliant hues
From midnight pools of deep blue -shades of green-
Imbued with spirit’s light, shining stars
N’er thought to break free
Assuage this fire
Lit by your gaze

Loved as I by
You

Fancy me, Love – the
Reality of you
Eternally
Entrapped in the freedom – of you



 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown

© Copyright 2000 Nicole Williams - All Rights Reserved
Christopher
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Purgatorial Incarceration
1 posted 2000-02-03 02:41 AM


Let me be the first to say how INCREDIBLE this poem is!!!

It's INCREDIBLE!!!

Loved:
"Amassed from naught but
Relishing the gifted
Melody of your
Smile"


I loved it all, but that, is what poetry is about!

[This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 02-03-2000).]

Marge Tindal
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2 posted 2000-02-03 07:14 AM


WOW !
What an awesome acrostic.
What an awesome poem.
WHAT AN AWESOME, AWESOME PAIR !

The subtly of this is truly amazing.
I think this may be one of the best
of yours I've seen to date.
~*Marge*~


 ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com


hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
3 posted 2000-02-03 10:32 AM


WONDERFUL!!!! This is absolutely one of your best poems I've yet to see. I love it

"Within your arms I am finally free" great line for an acrostic

Denise
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4 posted 2000-02-03 10:38 AM


'Entrapped in the freedom - of you'

That just about sums up the perfect love relationship!

Well done and beautiful!

Denise

Poet deVine
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Hurricane Alley
5 posted 2000-02-04 12:36 PM


Acrostically speaking this is great writing.. even without the acrostics, it's a wonderfully written poem. I congratulate you! I am looking forward to having you as a Mentor in the Teen Mentor Program!

JennyLee
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since 1999-09-01
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Northwestern, NJ.
6 posted 2000-02-04 11:05 AM


In Your Arms I Am Finally Free...
Nothing better than that Satiate!

Excellent form and writing  

Jenny Lee


[This message has been edited by JennyLee (edited 02-04-2000).]

Nicole
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since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835
Florida
7 posted 2000-02-04 01:10 PM


Chris - wow...geeze, guy.   Thanks so much!

Marge & Ruth - Thank you both, very much!  Such great compliments coming from two poets I greatly admire leaves me blushing and quite honored!  

Denise - Thank you!  

PdV - Thank you too!!  I very much look forward to being involved in the Mentor program!  

Jenny Lee - You're such a sweetie, thanks so much!  


 May I never be too busy to help another's load,
Then I'll be drinking from the saucer 'cause my cup has overflowed.

--Author Unknown

Munda
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since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544
The Hague, The Netherlands
8 posted 2000-02-04 06:42 PM


Satiate, this is icredible good. Love it..."within your arms I am finally free"...great line !  
Martie
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9 posted 2000-02-04 06:47 PM


Wonderful poem, much enjoyed.
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