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Martie
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0 posted 1999-12-29 10:33 PM



A Brother’s Merciless Tease

You sit against
the green Acacia tree
of my mind’s summer,
running your hand
across your nose.
This allergic salute
you are known for,
leaves a snail’s track
up that freckled road of cheek,
jumping the river of your eye,
coming to rest in your brow.

You were the cry of my child
you touched me and it hurt,
you teased the growing in me
and I wailed the strength you
had over my integrity.

Now,
the orange and gold
flying flowers of spring
you caught with your child-net,
have gone to rest in rainbows.
and you carry M.D. around
behind your name.
I didn’t know you
in your sterile white jacket
until now.

Against the green Acacia tree
you would always return to sit,
wearing the same days and hours
in your white tee-shirt
and dirt-stiff jeans,
your duck-tail plastered back

My minds summer
sings many season’s growth,
but your image was petrified
and tied to roots
stronger then those.

I have seen you in the new light
in the evening of time spent,
I watch you
surprised that you are old.
I place your graying
with my own,
disturbed in memory
into a man I like,
after the folly of rivalry
and the merciless tease of youth.
It’s about time.



 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

© Copyright 1999 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
Astraea
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1 posted 1999-12-29 10:39 PM


I like this one.  Very lovely.

~Astraea

 "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness."

"Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things."


Elizabeth Santos
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2 posted 1999-12-29 10:58 PM


Martie, It seems that wonderful writing like this gets pushed to the back so fast that I often miss it. I am in awe of your talents, Martie. I feel honored to be among your friends. Hope I get to meet you.
Liz

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3 posted 1999-12-29 11:37 PM


hehe. How do you keep coming up with this incredible imagery? You amaze me.
JOY 14
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4 posted 1999-12-29 11:43 PM


Martie, much enjoyed!

 JOY


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5 posted 1999-12-30 02:19 AM


Very heartfelt, your brother should be proud!

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Echo Rhayne
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6 posted 1999-12-30 06:51 AM


Yes, very lovely!


 ~*~ Hell is not a place of fire and a devil with a tail and horns. But a place of torment because the light of God is gone. To escape this, accept the blood of Jesus Christ! ~*~


Martie
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7 posted 1999-12-30 10:38 AM


Thank you so much for reading this poem and for commenting--my brother hasn't seen it yet.  I'm not sure how he would feel about it.  

 In the dew of little things,
the heart finds its morning
and is refreshed.
(ee cummings)

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8 posted 1999-12-30 10:48 PM


I'm sure he would love it, Martie! He might not say he liked it but I'm sure he will! It's beautiful!

 Denise


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9 posted 2001-09-28 05:01 AM


Wow Martie, this was fantastic.  You have a way of putting the reader right inside the poem and I enjoyed the visit.

~Better to write for yourself and have no public, than to write for the public and have no self~ Cyril Connolly

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