Open Poetry #5 |
Stop The World, I Want To Get Off |
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
(This is a post to my challenge to Scorched Dragon...just a bit of word play) Stop The World, I Want To Get Off In the streets, are children crying Guns shots ring and they are dying Our politicians all are lying And time and money, they are buying Is it true the world is ending? Or is it us that needs defending? While mothers for their children fending We keep on needing, keep on spending Is it us or them we’re cheating? Children starve while we are eating Natural resources, we’re depleting And all the while, ourselves defeating Hear parents, for their children, weeping See rain, through rooftops, quickly seeping Feel death approaching, softly creeping As you lay content and sleeping Children’s tears, they keep on pouring Inside them, hatred, they are storing Open your eyes and stop ignoring I’m asking, begging, now imploring We must all help, must not quit trying To stop the killing and the dying While in your bed, you safe are lying In the streets, are children crying < !signature--> I can live with the idea That we are merely actors Playing a part But I do wish Whoever is writing my script Would learn to use A few more Happy Endings ~Javan [This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 02-01-2000).] |
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Marilyn Member Elite
since 1999-09-26
Posts 2621Ontario, Canada |
I am one who always loves it when you play with words Ruth. This time is no exception. Well done! |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
WOW!! Ruth, this is so powerful! Excellent writing! Your talent shines! Denise |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Denise took the words from my mouth. What you say holds much truth. Well said from a master of words! Danny |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thanks Guys ...Guy and Girls I should say |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Hoot, as always, you make me think and you make me feel. I can't even watch commercials with kids hurting.....I cry. I have 3 of my own any worry and fret all the time.- SEA |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I can almost imagine hearing Barry McGuire singing this in the 60's. Well done, Ruth. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hoot- Exceptionally met self-challenge. Powerfully and, unfortunately, many truths spoken. Wonderful, Ruth. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Ruth this was really great! Wow is about all the words I can find...dramatic, deep down, stop and think, WOW! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
A "play" it may have been, but s'no game you speak of. You did amazing with this one! One of the hardest hitters to date. Succinct and powerful, you made your point eloquently! |
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tori Senior Member
since 1999-06-18
Posts 520Mechanicsville, Maryland, USA |
I like this one Ruth..... Bravo from all the children !! If with pen in hand I've made you think I've not wasted one drop of ink Vlh. visit my site~ http://www.hsanet.net/user/dkm/hellomy.htm |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ruth, I echo SEA, you make me think and you make me feel!!!! Many truths spoken indeed!!! Bravissima!! What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I'm glad my words make a few people stop and think, if even for a moment |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
You Play well as always Ruth I used to be schizophrenic, but we're ok now so don't make me mad cause I'm running out of places to hide the bodies......LOL |
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Gemini Senior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 1203Wisconsin, USA |
Hoot, this is a very poignant poem. We sometimes need this dose of reality to make us appreciate all we have and sometimes take for granted. Thank you. |
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catwomen Junior Member
since 2000-02-05
Posts 49 |
powerful poem, makes you stop and think sent chills up my spine |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thanks once more everyone for taking the time to not only read but comment. I'm glad my words fall not on deaf ears |
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jascanvey Member
since 1999-12-26
Posts 130England |
Wow, don't think I can say anything that hasn't already been said, except WOW! This is so good!! |
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