Open Poetry #5 |
Loving |
mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
With his eyes filled with glow, Near the fire so low... Throughout the evening, Just clinging, loving- Like no other person was alive. By and by the fire grew dimmer, Off to the shore, The tide beat against the rocks... Across the sky, there were streaks- Like the colors of love. Among everything, there I was alone... Against the cool, gentle breeze and my loved one. |
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SEA
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Marie, You paint a beautiful picture with so few words! Very nice. -SEA |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Mariee I agree with sea you have painted a beautiful picture...Very nice Tracie |
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Me2 Junior Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 25Escondido, CA USA |
I pictured places where I too have felt the same. I felt the cold as well as the warmth almost immediately. Thanks for taking me back to a place long a go. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Lovely and romantic! Very nice, Marie! Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A beautiful moment now made permanent with this lovely poem Liz |
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First__Knight Senior Member
since 1999-11-08
Posts 678 |
What a picture painted with your words. Thank you for the look into your world I used to be schizophrenic, but we're ok now so don't make me mad cause I'm running out of places to hide the bodies......LOL |
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mariee66 Senior Member
since 2000-01-30
Posts 596Recess, OfYourMind |
I want to say thank you all for reading and enjoying my poem~ Feel the love~ Marie~ |
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