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Preterition (A relatively timeless sestina)
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Preterition (A relatively timeless sestina) |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA 
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Vast epochs cast as fossiled specks in time, Striated tombs interred throughout the world Lend touchstone sediments to advent's kind. Thenceforth anon wends evolution's change; As harbinger, the nascency of life, Foretold of destinies fulfilled this day. Lost relics note Paleozoic day. Emergent firstlings from the womb of time, Prelusive tenets of all earthly life, Predate the Great Divides about this world. Mute artefacts boast evidence of change; That sapience upstood in rightly kind. Caved scriveners carved etchings of first kind, Scribed signatures of juvenescent day. 'Til Cheop's spire spake enigmatic change, All messengers of pre-recorded time; Colossal seemed as wonders of the world Bore witness to the rudiments of life. In Ancient East rose early factioned life. Societies of City-States in kind, Civilizations aimed to rule the world, Grand Empires fallen remnants of lost day. A Golden Age quelled Medieval time And Renaissance of spirit enscribed change. One metamorphic centenary change, Transmutant of simplistic way of life. Extensive progress unsurpassed in time, Unfounded passage for all humankind. The precipice of scientific day Defines existence of a modern world. Futurity rends visions for our world; Endurance yet a quest subject to change. What imminence befalls untrodden day, As man espies intergalactic life? A Universe alone 'tis naught mankind; An Age is but a second lest mistime. Temporal world yields pendency to life; Millenniums' change plenary in kind. Man's day a flicker in senescent time. [This message has been edited by Nan (edited 01-30-2000).] |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
Golly, and I have enough trouble making sense of what happened just yesterday . . . and as for writing a meaningful sestina . . . maybe I should just compliment you on your vocabulary, and vamoose. In other words, I admire. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Nan, Just what I needed to baffle my mind, an intellectual and eloquent sestina. Sorry, I can't come within a eon of this. So lost in the beauty and meaning, I didn't notice the repetition of ending words, it just flowed so smoothly through time. I'm in awe Liz |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, You weave an intricate cacoon. But is it not the same moon, The same sun the same tribune. I would my candy a bitter sweet. Then packaged in a frame so neat. But I do admit you are the best. And have met all and every test. Your poem is as wonderful as you. Love ya Sy |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Nan- Sure makes a phrase such as, 'This is wonderful', seem so mundane. However, words failing me- this is wonderful. Only sent me scurrying to the dictionary twice. I enjoyed the adventure. Whew! I'd say you've done a relatively splendiferous job with this. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Nan: Wow!!!...I had to read this several times and it's a while since I read anything concerning The Paleozoic Era...and I love "Renaissance of spirit enscribed change"..  HUSG Memories give you the power to collect roses in the winter... |
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Gene Senior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 935Colorado, USA |
"Vast epochs cast as fossiled specks in time, Striated tombs interred throughout the world..." What a great opening line. )I'm an amature Paleontologist). Loved it. ~Gene |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Nan, since we're speaking of the Paleozoic era, will you be my Pal? |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is excellent, Nan!! This was worth the wait!! Denise |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Now may I reply Nan ? Please, please, please ? LOL I had a heck of a time translation this , but I think I got it now. ; ) Nan, you do have a vocabulary ! And now that I understand what it is you're talking about....what can I say ? I am in total awe !  |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
Hey, I thought you said there was no "picture of thyme" you could post.... geez... Very fine poem, m'friend! I'm also envious of your vocabulary.... couldn't even spell "torture" yesterday, remember? Duh. This kind of work exemplifies the reasons you are the resident poetry teacher! Excellent! |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
Wow Nan. I'll admit, I had to go back and read this twice, and still I could not fathom the talent behind it. Bravo! P.S--Can you teach me how to write like that?  < !signature-->"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me." -Charles Brugnot [This message has been edited by Saxoness (edited 01-31-2000).] |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
magnifique. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
"Man's day a flicker"... For all our pomposity, that sure puts it in perspective, doesn't it? *G* Lovely, Nan! |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Yes Nan. I'm another in awe here...I loved this piece.. and Marge, I'm impressed...only two trips to the dictionary?!!! A soul that writes from the heart and shares it, truly gives a gift extraordinaire! Shannon |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I always read Nan's work with a Dictionary in one hand....good job...  |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I really appreciate your taking the time to read and comment on this - all of you - I know it's one of my heavy-hitters, and they sometimes can get a bit... um... overwhelming??... Reading your positive comments means a great deal to me, my friends......Thanks again  |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
"One metamorphic centenary change" Loved the whole thing('course) but this one grabbed me. It says so much in so little. |
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