Open Poetry #5 |
A love poem |
Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
A love poem She spun a web of golden balm, Encircling me with naked charm. And took my hand through fields of green, My lonely heart had never seen. Opened visions of intrusion, Far beyond the cast illusion. Held high a magic verse of light, That lit the darkest of my night. Bathed my soul in shards of rhyme, Dissolved the very truth of time. Opened a road to infinity, That went beyond intimacy. And I fell into the abyss, On the echoes of my bliss. And gave my earthly time away, For here, I would forever stay. I never knew what words could stir Until I met the likes of her. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour- This is indeed 'A Love Poem' You melt my heart with your phrases. WOW ! Just WOW ! Your words of love fall like petals from the rose. Embracing my heart encircling me. You weave magic. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy, She must be very eloquent for her words to have stirred the likes of you. Very beautiful, as always Love ya Liz |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Simply beautiful. To say more is impossible! |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
A true "Seymore" have we here Speaking of love with joy and cheer Words falling from is pen on to the paper No wonder he is after her Such Love displayed line by line Well done there Seymore, very fine Loved the read The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Oh Sy....you've got me 'sighing' again..This is sooo beautiful! |
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pigpen New Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 6Hastings,MI US |
That was truly awesome. I have a girl i feel the same way about and you summed it all with that poem. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Wondeful poem, Sy. Nathan |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
This is beautiful sy, so pure and lovely thus, that all that love, listen. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"I never knew what words could stir Until I met the likes of her." Words can enslave even the most haunted heart. Beautiful writing, Sy. Claire |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Bravo! I couldn't have said it better myself. I only wish that I could write love poems again. Who knows, maybe one day I will. Well done, thank you for sharing this. G Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
...uh...WOW! If I could write stuff like this, I could probably be one of the best poets at Passions! Incredible piece, Seymour! |
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devina Member Elite
since 1999-10-28
Posts 3539Cali |
The last line says it all Sy, you're a wonder, ya know??? Open arms can be the most fragile in the world... |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Simply beautiful, Seymour! Denise |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
And a beautiful love poem it is Outstanding Sy ! |
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Roniece Dawson-Bruce Member Ascendant
since 2000-01-29
Posts 5689Sydney, Australia |
I do like these words - you express them well ..... Roniece ..... |
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Alwye
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Member Elite
since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Wow, Sy...incredible. So lovely this is..I enjoyed it a lot. *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
To all the above, I am overwhelmed by the response to this poem. I can only offer my humble thanks and say I love you all. Sy |
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Buffpimp Junior Member
since 2000-01-23
Posts 39 |
This poem honestly touched me. This is very good. a love poem indeed is what this is Patrick |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Patrick, Very nice comment, thank you. |
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Beri Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 149 |
Beautiful words written to form a beautiful poem, Seymour. Definitely one of love! Its exquisite! Thanks for such a lovely read. If you love something, set it free, if it comes back to you, its meant to be... |
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jaxjoy Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 112Texas |
Isn't it wonderful how love stirs so many words and feelings within us? wow...great piece. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Sy, what a sweet tribute to your love. Made me smile. -SEA |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Beri, Thanks for the beautiful comment. Jayjoy, Yes it is and thank you. Sea, Your welcome to the smile, thanks. |
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Koon Junior Member
since 2000-01-27
Posts 43Singapore |
Wow!!! You've got to teach me how to write like that! I can never write like that....Great poem anyway. Koon- |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Seymore....this is perhaps one of the most wonderful poems I've seen from you and I've seen some mighty fine ones from you. This poem absolutely sings in rhythm. APPLAUDS!!! |
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dovesongs Member
since 2000-01-29
Posts 102Michigan |
Beautiful, just beautiful, she says with tears in her eyes. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This just heralded the love I saw between two seniors, and a love I won't soon forget. |
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