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This Pain of Glass
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This Pain of Glass |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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This Pain of Glass The pane I look out from this chair of words echoes the sunlit leaf in dust crusted glitter The dark shadow sways a winter glass dancer and entrancing grace of substance growing leaf of splendor just beyond greenly gamely plays the wind You are locked in rhythm yet do not touch you are separate yet alone Which is less or more of real in this vision my heart is touched by both one is like a blossom the other like a dream In heart this pain of glass is sharp This love of true and forever can still be free embrace is such circumference that the heart can’t measure this shadow that touches the crack I left open for expansion in life long quest Oh shadow you inhabit my core add dimension to my vision you must lay with me in this confusion that opens me to hesitation when all I want is to see My heart is glass and pain is not diaphanous its shattering is silent opening lets all the fragile chambers cry [This message has been edited by Martie (edited 01-29-2000).] |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Painfully beautiful, Martie. Your words always speak your heart! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
All I can say is "Wow!", Martie. and the way you interposed pain and pane was excellent. |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Feel not the shards of broken pane, For in your windowed heart is plain, Beats the caring soul of snow white dove, That soars on winds from heav'ns above. Another excellent work Martie. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Denise--You're right, my heart is in my words. Thank you. Balladeer--A wow from you is....well, wow! Mike--So sweet the bard has made your words my heart is soaring with the birds. Thank you for the excellent reply. |
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Alwye
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since 1999-06-16
Posts 3850In the space between moments |
Incredible Martie! It takes a lot of talent to do something like this, and to do it so well is stunning! Beautifully sad, I love it.  *Krista Knutson* ~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack, Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare, Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water, Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Martie, What a wonderful title, and a wonderful poem. It is stunning! I don't know how you describe a feeling so abstractly, and yet so clearly. You are a wonder Liz |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
I agree with Liz, you are a wonder Martie... Sad and gorgeous piece.... [This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 01-29-2000).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, You blew the shreds of pain and glass. Like snow upon a lonely pass. But left a trail of warm impart, Straight into your lonely heart. Wonderful poem. *L* Sy |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie- 'My heart is glass and pain is not diaphanous its shattering is silent opening lets all the fragile chambers cry' Sweet lady, this is simply a stunning piece of reflection. The pain may not be transparent .. but one can see clearly into the heart of this piece. I am in awe of your talent. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Chris Goodman Member
since 2000-01-28
Posts 92Issaquah, Washington usa |
Marie, This is very sad. But I LOVE IT. Thanks for writing this piece. Chris Goodman [This message has been edited by Chris Goodman (edited 01-29-2000).] |
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Little_Spyro Senior Member
since 2000-01-09
Posts 659San Diego, CA, USA |
Yeah, it's sad, all right...but sad doesn't mean it's not good--this is truly beautiful, Martie! -L.S. |
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Rosemary J. Gwaltney Senior Member
since 1999-08-26
Posts 997northern mountains, Idaho |
This poem truly reveals your extraordinary talent! Poignant and beautiful, I love the imagery and delicate use of metaphors. Beautiful, sad poem. Very sensitive and introspective. |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Alwye--Thank you so much for this incredible compliment. Liz--My friend, you make me smile with such words as stunning. thank you so much! Pepper--The wonder is you. Sy--What a lovely poem--thank you so much Marge--Thank you so much for your friendship and for enjoying my poetry. Hi Chris--thanks for reading this and for loving it. How great! LS--Thanks for reading this and thinking it beautiful. Rosemary--What a wonderful reply. I admire you work so much that your words make me feel great. Thankyou! |
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