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Martie
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0 posted 2000-01-28 03:13 PM


This Pain of Glass

The pane I look out
from this chair of words
echoes the sunlit leaf
in dust crusted glitter

The dark shadow sways
a winter glass dancer
   and
entrancing grace of substance
growing leaf of splendor
just beyond
greenly
gamely plays
the wind

You are locked in rhythm
yet do not touch
you are separate
yet alone

Which is less or more of real
in this vision
my heart is touched by both
one is like a blossom
the other like a dream

In heart this pain of glass
is sharp

This love of true and forever
can still be free
embrace is such circumference
that the heart can’t measure
this shadow that touches the crack
I left open for expansion
in life long quest

Oh shadow
you inhabit my core
add dimension to my vision
you must lay with me in this confusion
that opens me to hesitation
when all I want is to see

My heart is glass
and pain is not diaphanous
its shattering is silent
opening
lets all the fragile chambers
cry





[This message has been edited by Martie (edited 01-29-2000).]

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Denise
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1 posted 2000-01-28 03:32 PM


Painfully beautiful, Martie. Your words always speak your heart!
Balladeer
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2 posted 2000-01-28 04:27 PM


All I can say is "Wow!", Martie. and the way you interposed pain and pane was excellent.
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3 posted 2000-01-28 07:03 PM


Feel not the shards of broken pane,
For in your windowed heart is plain,
Beats the caring soul of snow white dove,
That soars on winds from heav'ns above.

Another excellent work Martie.  

Martie
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4 posted 2000-01-28 08:47 PM


Denise--You're right, my heart is in my words.  Thank you.

Balladeer--A wow from you is....well, wow!

Mike--So sweet the bard has made your words
      my heart is soaring with the birds.
Thank you for the excellent reply.

Alwye
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5 posted 2000-01-29 12:33 PM


Incredible Martie!  It takes a lot of talent to do something like this, and to do it so well is stunning!  Beautifully sad, I love it.  

 *Krista Knutson*

~*Like a lion, without fear of the howling pack,
Like a gust of wind, ne'er trapped in a snare,
Like a lotus blossom, ne'er sprinkled by water,
Let me, like a unicorn, in solitude roam.*~ Hymn Of Buddha


Elizabeth Santos
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6 posted 2000-01-29 04:33 AM


Martie,
What a wonderful title, and a wonderful poem. It is stunning! I don't know how you describe a feeling so abstractly, and yet so clearly. You are a wonder
Liz

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7 posted 2000-01-29 11:34 AM


I agree with Liz, you are a wonder Martie...
Sad and gorgeous piece....

[This message has been edited by Pepper (edited 01-29-2000).]

Seymour Tabin
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8 posted 2000-01-29 11:46 AM


Martie,
You blew the shreds of pain and glass.
Like snow upon a lonely pass.
But left a trail of warm impart,
Straight into your lonely heart.
Wonderful poem. *L* Sy

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9 posted 2000-01-29 12:31 PM


Martie-
'My heart is glass
and pain is not diaphanous
its shattering is silent
opening
lets all the fragile chambers
cry'

Sweet lady, this is simply a
stunning piece of reflection.
The pain may not be transparent ..
but one can see clearly into
the heart of this piece.

I am in awe of your talent.
~*Marge*~



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Chris Goodman
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10 posted 2000-01-29 04:53 PM


Marie,
This is very sad.  But I LOVE IT.  Thanks for writing this piece.

Chris Goodman

[This message has been edited by Chris Goodman (edited 01-29-2000).]

Little_Spyro
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11 posted 2000-01-29 04:55 PM


Yeah, it's sad, all right...but sad doesn't mean it's not good--this is truly beautiful, Martie!  

-L.S.

Rosemary J. Gwaltney
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12 posted 2000-01-29 05:25 PM


This poem truly reveals your extraordinary talent!  Poignant and beautiful, I love the imagery and delicate use of metaphors.  Beautiful, sad poem.  Very sensitive and introspective.
Martie
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13 posted 2000-01-29 06:41 PM


Alwye--Thank you so much for this incredible compliment.

Liz--My friend, you make me smile with such words as stunning.  thank you so much!

Pepper--The wonder is you.

Sy--What a lovely poem--thank you so much

Marge--Thank you so much for your friendship and for enjoying my poetry.

Hi Chris--thanks for reading this and for loving it.  How great!

LS--Thanks for reading this and thinking it beautiful.

Rosemary--What a wonderful reply.  I admire you work so much that your words make me feel great.  Thankyou!

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