Open Poetry #5 |
The Inscription |
hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
The Inscription I carved your name, in a heart, with the words "I love you" in the rough bark of a tree. The days passed, spring turned to summer, summer to fall, fall to winter, winter to spring, one year led on to another, and yet the letters remained. The trees bark wrapped them lovingly; dark moss blanketed the groves; the sun faded the letters; but still, they endured. Oh, how that inscription weathered the storms... I wish I could say the same for our love. I can live with the idea That we are merely actors Playing a part But I do wish Whoever is writing my script Would learn to use A few more Happy Endings ~Javan |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
It is strange isn't it, the lasting symbols that inanimate objects can hold. The muse has found you I see. Great poem! |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Again, you touch us with soulful thoughts. This one is lasting! DH |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very lovely, Ruth. Sad yet beautiful! |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Well done. Splended effort. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent thought placed on paper, Ruth. The chiseled always outlasts the chiseler. |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
hoot owl, your last lines forced a heartfelt "ouch, that hurts" from me. (And so did Balladeer's last comment, in another way!) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ruth, this is simply beautiful, very sad and heart wrenching, especially the last 4 lines. *hugs* my friend. What comes from the heart goes to the heart. Samuel Coleridge |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Love is indeed a fragile thing, Ruth... Nicely done, of course.. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
My dear Hoot....... As always you touch the softest part of my heart and melt it completely. Your words are always so beautiful. I hope to write as wonderful as you someday......I'm a long ways off yet....but still I hope....... -SEA |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Ruth this was excellent as I find all your work to be that way! I wish it could stay as long as it does on the tree too! Sometimes if they could be like the tree, shade you and cover you and never fight with you or decieve you or hurt you! Wouldn't it be nice...but ya know...they could say the same thing bout us too... =o) Excellent work my friend! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Hoot- I smile with tender remembering at this. In the trunk of a grapefruit tree one heart two names growing deeper each year On a sycamore one heart two names exfoliating bark removed all traces of the inscription of love Fabulous memories invoked. Thank you. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sometimes a lost love is also etched into the heart for many years Lovely poem Liz |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
Sad the way live sometimes unfold' From time to time we losing our hold Well written but so sad within the heart The heart that carries the name of two But remember this, he loved you too. A nice poem but so darn sad I'm caused a tear to flow. Hugs and Love, always The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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Pepper Member Elite
since 1999-08-19
Posts 3079Southern Florida |
Stunning Ruth... |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Thank you everyone...you're a special group of people |
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