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Happily Never After |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Far across fertile fields and raging rivers Through woods filled with wooden slivers Underneath the bluest of skies Lies a castle built of stone and timber Proudly does the heralding flags fly Brightly does the sun ever shine here Washing over the merry people clear Rising up in the middle of the castle, a tower Strong and tall, an example of the royal power Parapets placed upon the top like a crown The princess within, spends every waking hour Forlornly looking out, and down Fingers working the loom, spinning through time Anything to ease her heavy, burdened mind Below the tower, the people move unknowing Their faces beaming, a happy countenance showing Going about with everyday cares While up above, constant tears flowing A still and stifling silence in the air As she waits with hands clasped saintly, Waiting for her prince to return, patiently |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JML, I'm sure the prince will return, enjoyed the read. |
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kitkat Senior Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 878Nova Scotia |
Please tell me there will be more. Does the prince return? -------------- You got to get up every morning with a smile on your face and show the world all the love in your heart Then people are gonna treat you better You're gonna find, yes you will That your beautiful as you feel.~~~ Carol King |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
You know i never thought of that. I thought the title would kind of answer that. I don't like to be sugary sweet. I like to slip dark, depressing, sensual themes into my love poems whenever i can. Because after all, isn't that what reality really is? Thanks Kitkat and Seymour. |
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Meadowmuse Member Elite
since 1999-12-27
Posts 3263 |
"Fingers working the loom, spinning through time Anything to ease her heavy, burdened mind" Splendidly written and intriguing. Claire |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The setting is great....the happy people on the ground unaware of the unhappy princess above with the bright sun shining down. I can see it with clarity. |
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PoeticKnight Senior Member
since 2000-01-20
Posts 1144New Orleans, LA |
Thanks Meadowmuse, I like that line too, probably because i was unconscious when i wrote it and can't remember how i came up with it. And thank you Balladeer, that is exactly what i was trying to portray. |
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