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On Top of my Head (challenge from Rebecca)
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On Top of my Head (challenge from Rebecca) |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
His sheepish grin foretold A tale I would not forget Though he confesses his sins to me This was the best one yet. I settled down to listen My heart filled with dread “Sis,” he whispered guiltily “Last night I wore panties on top of my head” I tried not to gasp Tried hard not to stare All I could say was “What were they doing there?” “I don’t remember” he replied “I wasn’t drinking a lot But when I woke up, I was naked In the A&P parking lot” He told the simple tale Of a night filled with cheer And all too soon I realized He drank a case of beer! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
ROFL @ you! I was joking but you've got me crackin up! But you always do! Good one Sharon! LOL |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
ROFL...I don't know how you do it Sharon..*g* HUSG Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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Sally S. Senior Member
since 1999-06-07
Posts 847Ohio |
LOLOLOL You're just too much fun, Sharon!! That was some challenge...giggles. The thing is that there were friends of mine where I work, that once wore men's boxers on their heads while we went outside for a break. They said it was to keep their ears warm...they hadn't drank a drop. Did I mention, I love my job? LOL |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
The postings to this poem confuse me. I find it well done, but not at all *funny* -- but then I've just come from reading Elizabeth Santos piece on alcoholism. My brother finnally got out of it through AA. I don't think this was meant to be funny, was it? |
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RainbowGirl Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023United Kingdom |
Ted: I presume you mean me as I posted on Elizabeth's...well, I have a sense of humour and the humour was in PDV being able to take up the challenge rather than the situation itself and it in no way detracts from the beauty of Elizabeth's post...I see nothing wrong in sharing both sadness or laughter so long as both are genuine and I think most would not be offended by my post...I'm really sorry you were.. HUGS Don't ask me where I'm going, just listen when I'm gone and far away you'll hear me singing softly to the dawn. |
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Ted Reynolds Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 331 |
No offense taken or offered, RainbowGirl. I think these posts are supposed to reflect what we feel at the time, and sometimes we laugh when we think afterwards we should have cried . . . and sometimes the other way around. Don't let anything I write stop our speaking heart to heart -- that's what Passions lets us do. |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Dear PDV You started my day off with a good laugh. This reminds me (and I don't usually drink) of the time I had a glass of wine and when asked, couldn't for the life of me remember my daughter's name. It does strange things to the mind, I hope they never find me in a parking lot with anything other than a hat on my head. Liz |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I don't drink at all...and I had taken this poem to a darker, more serious place, then rewrote it as I wanted something silly. By the way, the phrase Rebecca gave me was "Last night I wore panties on top of my head"..the stinker giggled thinking I couldn't possibly do it!  Thank you all for your comments. If I've even made one of you smile, the poem was worth it!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Poet deVine, You did a wonderful job, always enjoy your work. *L* Sy |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
ROFL |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Well, off the top of my head, I'd say this was quite entertaining...  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I'd never bet against you meeting any poetic challenge and meeting it well, PDV! *G* Great job! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
And I'm still gigglin too! heheehe...hey I know by now you can put anything to rhyme! haha |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
ROFL..how the heck did I ever miss this?!  Hillarious! Denise |
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