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Corinne
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state of confusion

0 posted 2000-01-23 01:37 PM


Across the chasm,
nothing but a faint dot
shouting to be heard,
but echoes scramble words,
cuping my ear to ending sounds.

Once, the distance was not so great,
looking back, the gap was always there,
too many differences between us.

Now at opposite ledges,
this canyon of our creation,
I sense the earth beneath my feet,
while you ponder skies of blue.


© 2000 Corinne Bailey


© Copyright 2000 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
Martie
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1 posted 2000-01-23 01:55 PM


Wow, this really showed the chasm and differences between people so well.  So sad but well done!
Denise
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2 posted 2000-01-23 02:34 PM


Wow! This is excellent, Corinne! And I especially loved the last two lines. They said it all!
Poet deVine
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3 posted 2000-01-23 02:35 PM


I can relate to this one! Sometimes the widest distance between two people is not measured in miles!
Corinne
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4 posted 2000-01-23 03:42 PM


Thank you Marte, Denise and Poet de Vine!

Corinne

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5 posted 2000-01-23 03:55 PM


Corrine:

So few words say so much.  I enjoyed this ...

--Kess

PS:  Line 5 -- should be "cupping"  


 Full fathom five thy father lies,
Of his bones are coral made,
Those are pearls that were his eyes;
Nothing of him that doth fade
But doth suffer a sea-change
Into something rich and strange...


--William Shakespeare, from The Tempest


simplyYRREHS
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6 posted 2000-01-23 04:09 PM


Beautifully written, Corinne, "choc ful 'o emotions".  

Sherry

 "Heaven is under our feet as well as over our heads." ~Henry David Thoreau



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