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Things You Do |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia 
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" Things You Do " Loud Noise I do hear Every time You are near I think its my heart Beating so Strong Trying to sing you a passionate song Floating empty I feel inside Every time Your by my side I think its my tummy Rumbling about To get you attention Its trying to shout Fizziness flowing I feel it inside Everytime That you walk by I think its my blood Pumping quickley through Trying to tell you of the love for you |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
Hi there, Whiskey-girl. It appears you are going through those ol' feelings again. Good for you! I hope this love is THE love. As for those rumblings... well, take it from me, a chilidog with onions is NOT a good dinner idea when there's to be a walk in the moonlight. Hugs to you, lil one. I love your poem. |
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Nate Dogg Senior Member
since 1999-11-15
Posts 1658Georgia, Fulton |
Lovely poem, Whiskey! Nathan |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
The signs are clear as i can see Yes in love is she Good for you to feel this way Perhaps that is what your doctor will also say Well written and in such style Glad you wrote such Love Lullaby The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Thanks guys for your nice replies  |
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Rus Bowden Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 139 |
hi whiskey, you brought those feelings out so well in this poem. nice work. enjoyed, very much. rus |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
whiskey, again, another lovely poem. Haven't been disappointed yet with your writing and I doubt I ever will [which is a good thing!]. Very nice. Feelings like that are always nice. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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