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0 posted 2007-04-13 11:06 PM



I know it's been awhile since I've been here, I read often, just no time to do much else, and, I apologize for being here now when I need a little help. But, here I am, running home and asking for help.  Below is a poem I wrote for a friend of mine, her ex-husband passed away and she asked me to write a poem for his memorial cards (We were all friends and our kids grew up together)...She is taking care of all of it because they were still friends and he is the father of her 2 sons, and he has no one else.  The boys are 17 & 21, and the circumstances surrounding their dads death wasn't pretty.  He was 53, and a diabetic...he went for a walk on February 12, and never came home.  His body was found on February 22 frozen, all but his head covered with snow.  We live in western NY and we got a couple of feet in the first couple of days he was missing, thankfully a couple of cross country skiers found him.  Anyway, it was sad and horrible, and the boys decided they wanted to have a memorial service on his birthday which is next Friday!  The pine tree he was found under for some reason means a lot to them and that is what she wanted me to write about...can you please tell me if this is ok, or how I might be able to change it...I just feel really unsure ... Thanks in advance.  Bonnie

Majestic Pines

You walked along that familiar path,
The snow softly swirling around,
Dressing the pine in a winter white coat,
Providing a shelter, of sorts, on the ground.
Your love for nature guided you,
To this place ~ ~ and to this pine,
When you tired it seemed the perfect place,
To sit for a while and unwind.
To watch the cardinals huddling,
As they settled in for the night,
And to see the winter sunset,
For you, a magnificent sight…
This stately pine watched over you,
Angel’s wings gently brushed your sleeve,
Under the stars, where you’d want to be,
As you grew weary and had to leave.


© Copyright 2007 Bonnie Church - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2007-04-14 08:46 AM


I think it's very touching, Bonnie. I'm sure they will appreciate its gentle love.
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2 posted 2007-04-14 09:01 AM


HelloSweetLady~
I think it is poignantly lovely and would be a most welcomed word-memory for them to have~

Good to see you my friend~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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3 posted 2007-04-14 09:33 AM


Bonnie, I cannot think of a tribute more worthy of this gentle man.  My prayers extend to your friends and their families.
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4 posted 2007-04-14 12:27 PM


Yes, this is very poignant and caring. A beautiful tribute.

Love,
Margherita

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5 posted 2007-04-16 06:12 AM


Looks and reads perfect to me.His ex wife and his sons and will appreciate you for writing this. martyjo
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6 posted 2007-04-16 06:23 AM


It is beautiful, and a loving tribute of quiet dignity and respect for the last moments of a human's earthly stay.
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7 posted 2007-04-17 07:06 PM


Beautifully done.  I'm sure they'll be more than pleased with your thoughtful tribute.

   Rae

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