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buckysimone Junior Member
since 2003-10-19
Posts 27 |
why don't you throw out your hand will everything be alright your smile seems so far so distant so free when can i can i touch your lips i'd love love it to see you smile the sounds violins scratching the board why im reaching your dragging im bruising im losing why |
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tecoyah Member
since 2003-11-16
Posts 83NY |
ouch...hope this is just creative expression, if not you have my best wishes...liked the form, well done |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Last time I looked 'im' wasn't in the dictionary. 'I'm' is a word however. Incorrect spelling is very off-putting. Something to think about. K |
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edh Member
since 2003-03-26
Posts 111 |
Looking for some punctuation. Perhaps some caps here and there and periods. So the reader is not just flying through the text. |
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