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why the white is so vulnerable?
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why the white is so vulnerable? |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence 
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street castle glows. red. white. continents flash through a touch of immortality. breaking the black sky two lights fight for a space of one. please, touch the hand and find the face it belongs to. before it's now. psychedelic world is not real under the circumstances of white. circus travels. place your bet on the color of reality. thirteen hours of black and white movies gliding among touches of rouge. zebras swim in an ocean crossing by the place where is less. and a world bumps into thousand clowns. hold the hand. recognition between awake and chronic insomnia. caffeine smells funny in the brain. the hand awaits. chameleon is multi-colored in the dark when can't be seen. rainbow pollutes the moon. why the white is so vulnerable? |
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Seth Member
since 2003-04-13
Posts 74Arizona |
At first this didn't make any sence to me. Then, I dropped acid and now things are so much clearer...including this poem! Actually, while this piece does need work, I rather enjoyed it. I will offer my oppinion of one line for your concideration.... where you talk about finding the face, just leave it at that...let the readers imagination see the next line. When I read "that it belongs to" it was agrivating for me because I saw it before i read it. Does that make any sence? In any event tahts just my oppinion, take it for waht its worth. Hang in there and youll get some better critisism from someone more qulaified. |
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