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Slaves of the dark |
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Magia_negra Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 77CA, USA |
My flesh is full of sweetest juice that you could find If you are hungry you can try to eat its part And later on when you are done I'll lie beside Drained by your kiss I'll drink your sparkling blood. We will be demons on the road that lies through hell We'll scare the strangers on the way where we will dwell We will be playing dirty games with dirty minds While hungry hearts will wait for brightness of sunrise. I'll sing you songs that were gone and left behind By those who rushed to see the light that made them blind I'll give you cries of newborn souls and old empires And places where at midnight you can see vampires. We are alone, we'll be alone; the rest of them Will watch and say that we are cursed forever We will be dancing slowly under purple rain Without any fear to die or sever. And broken glass will cut our feet and make us laugh I'll tie your arms and you will never say 'enough' We'll clean our souls with chilling agonizing pain We'll burn in dirt; from dust we will be born again. ...somos los locos para siempre |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Hello Magia, Welcome to CA (Critical Analysis). This is an interesting first post. It certainly has a dark element, at least as I see it. It's not my style so I won't try to critique. Actually, I don't usually try to critique a first post anyway. After it finishes here and you have it well polished, you might want to submit it in the Dark forum. Again, welcome. I'm sure you will enjoy yourself here. Check your email for a welcoming message. Pete |
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Magia_negra Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 77CA, USA |
Thanks, Pete!  ...somos los locos para siempre |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
Welcome to Passions, Magia. You do have an interesting bent toward Dark...it is safe to say that you'll find a number of poets in Dark who will certainly appreciate your offerings. I do hope you enjoy Passions, and all it has to offer. |
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