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IcyFlamez89 Member
since 2003-02-14
Posts 292Jersey City NJ |
It's my first poem here, so I hope you guys like it. I could have been a hero, Instead I watched the pain. If I could bring you sunshine, I'd rather bring you rain. Born of neglect, I drown in failed ashes. Lights of renewal approach me But I comfort in the shadows. Oh deadly storm and tempest, I felt the painful joys, I shared my hated love. Why keep me breathing so? The shifting sands of memory Forget me not again. But remember as I fade, A second lost in time. My heart, dark and cold, Beats on a burdened chest. My pitiful soul, weak and tearful, Caged inside the abyss. The kindness burns, The light blinds. But the night is my ecstasy. The gloom is my life. When will I find the bliss of eternity? And can I feel again, The lovely kiss of tenderness? The Light is now my friend. |
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IcyFlamez89 Member
since 2003-02-14
Posts 292Jersey City NJ |
Just lookin at my old poem here, and I think this needs abit of tweakin now. mayb a steady meter and a betta choice of words prolly. |
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