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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
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The Funeral. (a working title) In mourning sky fell cats and dogs freely as they came grey above beyond below In mourning sky fell cats and dogs freely Originally I had "mourning" as "morning" but I wanted to change it, but now I'm not sure that it was the right choice, does it make the image too easy to visualise? Actually I think i'm too attached to my poetry to see what is and is not working so any comments would be helpful and recieved most gratefully  Andrew My Violent Bedtime Stories [This message has been edited by Marshalzu (02-03-2003 04:19 PM).] |
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Gamree Junior Member
since 2003-01-29
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I like the simplicity. Some would say the "mourning" sky is a bit over the top, but I like it. |
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