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brianm Junior Member
since 2002-11-22
Posts 16Colorado |
can you feel the pain crying out from the innermost depths of my being it cries for you dear father the strength of my flesh is rotting my soul the burning.. the longing.. breathing... i feel faithless have i lost my way with the map to my face where is it that my heart is seeking shelter where is my love why is it that i can not find her did i only glance into her face and forget her worth did she not see me, standing and weeping in the empty room if you direct me Lord, i will run i will run until the end until my lungs bleed until my heart bursts and i am dead i will run - 12.13.02 - [This message has been edited by brianm (12-20-2002 10:41 AM).] |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
What is this about? You need a lot more detail and expansion to make this interesting. The first line just makes me think of Austin Powers and Bill Clinton at a gym. Can you feel the pain, Baby, can you feel the pain? What do you want to get across here? |
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