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The Worth Of Love
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millercm New Member
since 2002-10-08
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THE WORTH OF LOVE "How do I love thee? Let me count the ways" As Browning's poem started off to say But how does one measure the worth of love When it's sent as a gift from up above? Love has many meanings, depends on who And the morals and values of what we choose Nor can it either be bought or sold Yet can make one richer than wealth untold Love is the feeling held deep inside It rules our life, both far and wide It can bring greatest men to their knees Or rebuild lives of peasants like me You cannot touch it nor can you see But it's full of life and what's more its free It can build mighty mountains, withstand the raging storms Bring comfort in distress, make the cold nights warm But to live this love throughout your life Means willingness to give and sacrifice To give to others, all you can give Giving part of yourself that they might live A truer more rich and fulfilling life Through all your hard work and sacrifice Love's the greatest power bestowed on earth But to get you must give, for all it's worth! [This message has been edited by millercm (10-08-2002 03:29 PM).] |
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Robtm1965 Member
since 2002-08-20
Posts 263 |
Miller First, when posting for critical appraisal always make sure you check for typographical errors. An error in the first line of a poem sends negative messages to a reviewer. My immediate advice to you if you want to improve your poetry is to cease writing about ““love”” for the time being at least. Anything but love! It been done so much already that it is extremely difficult, unless you happen to be a genius poet, to bring anything new to the topic. And if you can’t bring anything new you start out with a BIG handicap in grabbing the reader’s attention. Perhaps the other main point to make is that whatever you write you should try in your early poetry to avoid abstract phrases and words. These are words that do not convey specific images to the reader, or mean completely different things to different readers and so lose their effect in producing the effect the writer is seeking. Lastly avoid cliches at all costs when you start out writing. Always look for new and original ways to say things. You won’t always succeed but the mental effort will pay dividends in the long run. One good thing about your poem is the rhythm that you have managed to generate. You clearly have an ear for sound and meter. Now all you need to do is find an interesting topic and an interesting way to write about it. If you want me to clarify or expand on any of the above, just ask. Rob |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions! You jumped into the most difficult of all forums, but I am sure you must have looked around a bit, read some, and appreciated how well the inhabitants of our CA Forum come across with their critiques. I, for one, do not critique very well, but I DO look for waving new file flags, just to say, Hello! Welcome to your new Poets Home! Karilea |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
Hi! Welcomed to the forum! I found both your topic and the manner you express it interesting. Love is an emotion so universally experienced that poets have always felt impelled to put their emotions down in verses. No need to feel guilty about this. It is natural. After all, poetry is not only for publication in some stuffy literary university periodical which only a handful of foggy-eyed professors read anyway. Poetry can be a personal expression of caring for a loved one. Or simply a way to get things off one's chest. Both are very legitimate reasons to write poetry. So no need to deprive yourself of these. That would probably impoverish your life and possibly lead to discouragement for lack of inspirational motivation. Here is a place that will keep the creative juices flowing: Love Poetry Poetry Contest Inspirational Contest for new writers offering prizes and publishing online on website for Inspirational Poetry, Love Poetry and Childrens Poetry. ... Love Poetry. ... http://troupers.com/Troubadors.Com/Love_Poetr "How do I love thee? Let me count the ways[.]" As Browning's poem started off to say[.] But how does one measure the worth of love When it's sent as a gift from up above? Love has many meanings, depends on who And the morals and values of what we choose Nor can it either be bought or sold Yet can make one richer than wealth untold Love is the feeling held deep inside It rules our life, both far and wide It can bring greatest men to their knees Or rebuild lives of peasants like me You cannot touch it nor can you see But it's full of life and [] it[']s free It can build mighty mountains, withstand the raging storms[,] Bring comfort in distress, make the cold nights warm But to live this love throughout your life Means willingness to give and sacrifice To give to others, all you can give Giving part of yourself that they might live [Try to avoid repetition of "give".] A truer [] [richer] [] fulfilling life Through all your hard work and sacrifice Love's the greatest power bestowed on earth But to get you must give, for all it's worth! [Since you do use punctuation by pausing with commas and exclamation points, then periods should also be used to remain consistent. I fixed some errors but left most for you to correct. As was suggested, you should run this poem through a spellchecker to minimize typographical errors.] [This message has been edited by Radrook (10-08-2002 04:17 PM).] |
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