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StormyB Junior Member
since 2007-07-18
Posts 42Ohio Usa |
I wrote this one upsidedown. I can't explain why, other than the thought just came to me. So, as you read it the first words are actually "When things are tough..." basic left to right read, just from the bottem to the top. At the Top Your right where you should have been. Look real hard and then you’ll find If you happen to notice a grin Next time you see your reflection The ones you thought you left behind Deep inside your happy thoughts See images in mirror’s of our mind Shut your eyes, stay real still No matter how small a part The happiness that each day brings That tend to melt one’s heart Remind yourself the simple things The mentality, that things can turn around. Just keep a open mind. When everything seems upside down and hard to accept When things seem tough, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
So I stood on my head to see from bottom up and realized it's so easy... just don't try drinking from a cup... Actually... it reads well both ways... and THAT's not an easy trick! So I have to criticism to give, other than I wish I could do so well! |
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StormyB Junior Member
since 2007-07-18
Posts 42Ohio Usa |
Thankyou so much. Although it was a bit of a struggle for as I noticed a major drop in the flow at "See images in mirror’s of our mind Shut your eyes, stay real still" I think it was more the see images in the mirrors of our minds that broke it. Any suggestions? [This message has been edited by StormyB (07-28-2007 09:48 AM).] |
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